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IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - LINE GRAPH - The percentage of the population living in cities



HY Ho 1 / -  
Feb 18, 2025   #1
The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph reveals data about the proportion of residents living in cities across four different nations, namely: Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia, over the 71-year period from 1970 to 2040, with expectations for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, it is evident that the ratio of people living in cities in all four countries will show upward trends. Another interesting point is that the figure for Malaysia will almost remain predominantly the highest throughout the period. Besides, the figure for Indonesia will have experienced the most significant increase over the period.

In detail, the percentage of habitants living in cities in Malaysia stood at 30% in the starting year, followed by a significant increase is predicted to approximately 85% by 2040. Looking at Thailand, its figure was at slightly under 20%, which was about 20% lower than that of Malaysia at the same time, before soaring to slightly above 47% by the end of 2040.

Regarding the proportion of the population residing in urban areas across Indonesia will have risen remarkably by 4 times, from approximately 15% in 1970 to 60% in 2040. For its figure in the Philippines, a notable development is forecast from 30% to more than 55% by the end of the period.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15590  
Feb 24, 2025   #2
The essay is overwritten. This should only be 200 words at the most. By writing 206 words, you have cut a bit into your task 2 writing time, which could mean that you will lack time to write a properly developed task 2 essay. Always stay within the time frame of 175 - 200 words, for maximum scoring consideration.

The summary overview will not receive a passing score because it was written as a run on sentence. There should be at least 4 sentences in this paragraph considering the number of informative ideas that exists in the current run on sentence. The failing preliminary score for this section will prevent you from getting a better score in the succeeding sections. Learn to keep a standard number of sentences per paragraph to allow you to maximize the scoring consideration for each. That means, you have to write 3-5 sentences per paragraph.


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