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The line graph provides the information about the number of people who visit Australia


krempetkov 13 / 29 6  
Dec 15, 2016   #1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.

My biggest problem druting the writing was to combine the overview information for the table and the graph, as i was not able to combien the two sentences. I will appreciate, if you give me suggestion how to do it and how is my try.

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The line graph provides the information about the number of people who visited Australia in the period between 1975 and 2005, while the table specifies on the nationality of the tourists. It is clear to see that, the number of visits by overseas residents increased significantly throughout the given period, as for the background of the tourists - an uplifting trends were observed in every single country listen in the table.

In 1975, Australia was visited by 1- million overseas residents. During the following 10 years, a went up by 50% was observed in the people attending Australia. The increasing trend continue and approximately 24 million tourists visited the country, but the peak in the number of visitors was experienced in 2005, when the amount of tourists skyrocketed, as more than 30 million people visited the country.

During 1975, the greatest proportion of tourists was the Japan's, closely followed by the South Korea's. proportion. Both Europe's and Britain's proportions were of about 1 million, whereas the number of visitors from USA and China was of respectively, 04 and 0,3 million. In 2005, the biggest exceed was experienced by Japan's proportion, as it went up by nearly 4 times compared to its preceded rates. Another major increases were observed by the figures of South Korea and Europe, while the uplifts in China, USA and Britain were not as significant.

ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Dec 16, 2016   #2
Combining the information from the graph and table into the overview sentence is quite simple. You don't need to worry about that. I think that it is better to simplify your overview sentence rather than make it complicated like what you have done in your essay. Instead of writing this sentence:

- It is clear to see that, the number [...] observed in every single country listen in the table.

You can simply write like this and it is acceptable:

- Overall, it can be seen that, the number of visitors who visit Australia showed a significant upward trend whereas Japan appeared to be dominant amidst five other countries throughout the period.

As you can see, both noticeable data are clearly depicted in the example that I have given to you. Additionally, I also notice some repetitive patterns in your body paragraph. Try to start everything clearly since the very beginning. The examiner might confuse when looking at your body paragraphs. You did write the first sentence for each without saying which data that come from either the line graph or the table. At least you need to mention them once in the beginning part to address the examiner and improve your clarity as well.


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