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The line graph shows the percentage of money used for food, leisure, clothing, transport, and fuel


hieumit107 1 / -  
Oct 12, 2021   #1

the proportion of total expenditure in a certain European country



The line graph demonstrates the percentage of money used for food, leisure, clothing, transport, and fuel in certain European countries from 1960 to 2000.
Overall, almost all expenditure was decline. While people use the money for transport was rise.
In 1960, money was spent on food was highest (34%), followed by leisure with 18%. Over the next 40 years, the figure for food and leisure fall dramatically and reach the lowest point each, 14% and 11% respectively. Money consumption for transport was sharp growth and overtook food as the first rank in 2000.

Spending on clothing and fuel decrease slightly from 1960 to 1980. Over the whole 20-year period, both clothing and fuel stay unchanged around 5% and 4%.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,835 4783  
Oct 13, 2021   #2
Automatic failing grade.The mere fact that the essay contains 120/150 words and does not follow the paragraph formation requirement of a Task 1 essay ensures the failing score. This will be so even with scores assigned to the vocabulary and grammar sections. A passing score cannot be awarded for the C + C section since the image is evidently under analyzed and little discussed in the report.

An expanded presentation composed of 3 paragraphs is necessary for proper scoring. The exam taker was in a hurry to report on obvious data. He neglected to complete a proper analysis and comparison in the process. There should be 3 sentences per paragraph. The writer must review the content and formatting requirements for this task before his next practice session.
david2004 2 / 5  
Oct 19, 2021   #3
You should definitely expand your essay since this hasn't reached 150 words. Also, your overview should be reviewed, you shouldn't split it into 2 short sentences like that.

Hope you can learn something from my comment. Wish you the best of luck!
gbach 3 / 8  
Oct 19, 2021   #4
@hieumit107
money used for food, leisure, clothing, transport, and fuel different life aspects (you shouldn't enumerate all categories in the opening of task 1)

You should care more about your grammar and sentence structures. Also, write more in your overview


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