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Line graph - spending much money on buying books


anita11 28 / 20 2  
Feb 21, 2016   #1
The line graph highlights the percentage of citizens aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in three countries. In common, it is obviously seen that the proportion of elderly in Japan, USA, and Sweden will be upward during one century.

According to the data, Japan stood as the lowest percentage (5 %), though it was level down up to the next four decades. Next, the prediction is that it will gradually increase until 2030 even though it will be stable as the least trend. Surprisingly, the number of unproductive people in Japan is predicted enormous increase three times during a ten-year of periods and then becomes the highest data.

However, in 1940, USA began the greatest trend and experienced gradually increase, followed by Sweden which is almost equivalent. Interestingly, they had the same point in 2000, and then USA remained steady while Sweden experienced double. Equally important, both of them repeat similar tend in 2005. It is predicted that Sweden will be the second rate and USA to be the third.



Riiskacha03 31 / 34 5  
Feb 21, 2016   #2
Hi Anita, your uploaded picture is not suitable your explanation. the other thing is, since the time frame between 1995 and 2005, so you have to use past tense in your writing. please look at the time carefully before start to analise the data. I will not make correction of the tense anymore since I had already mentioned it to you.

Firstly, 80 million of the German'S income ...

... to books stood at roughly 55 MILLION ...

the slight decrease during the period had not reached the third position .
it is better to clearly mention in what rank German now rather than mention that it had not reached any certain position.
Bunglon11 28 / 31 5  
Feb 26, 2016   #3
The line graph highlights the percentage of citizens aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in three different countries from 1940 to 2040 . In commonOverall , it is obviously seen that the proportion of elderly in Japan,... (better if you explain two sentence here, e.g: There are upward trends in the number of elderly in all of countries. While in the first period, USA showed the dominance, Japan is predicted increasing dramatically in the future surpassing USA )


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