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# The Line graphs of how much people in UK and US to spend on Petrol

Diazalichsan 3 / 6 1
Jan 5, 2017   #1

## petrol expense of citizen in the USA and UK

The line graph informs the percentage of petrol expense of citizen in United States and United Kingdom in three categories of people. Overall, it can be seen that people between middle income and rich on both countries have equal number of expense in Petrol.

Looking at the figures, the poor people in United States and United Kingdom have different percentage of expense in Petrol. The poorest in Unites States spent about 4-6% of their income on the petrol, while the people in United Kingdom only use 0.5-2% of their income to buy gasoline. However, there was a gradual differences in the use of Petrol of the middle income people in United States, they spent around 5-4% of their income on Petrol. Conversely, the middle income people in United Kingdom experienced significant percentage than poor people, with 3-4% of their income to buy petrol.

Interestingly, the group of people between middle income and richest witnessed equal number of percentage in the use of Petrol for both countries. The two line met at 4% on the use of Petrol for both countries. On the end of the figures, the percentage of use of petrol for rich people in United States decreased significantly than middle group at around 2-3%. In contrast, with rich people in United Kingdom with 3-4%.

Nuverte0452 5 / 24 2
Jan 5, 2017   #2
I am just correcting some grammar error.

... people in the United Kingdom experience a gradual percentage increase in the usage of petrol , with 3-4% of their ...
Jan 6, 2017   #3
@Diazalichsan
It's a great essay for a line graph
krempetkov 13 / 29 6
Jan 7, 2017   #4
First, I would change the word "Interestingly", you are not supposed to give your personal opinion.

Second, about your overview - it's always better to give additional information to the examiner. Describe the main movements and the most significant changes.

"The first graph increased gradually till 2011, before experiencing a dramatic decrease. In contrast, the second graph had been decreasing for the first 2 years, and then a significant increase was observed."

That is just an example, bit I think it presents a good way to write an overview

Now some grammatical suggestions:

have different - have a different

So many times, you have forgotten the defining article before the countries names

nandasharma 14 / 53 9
Jan 7, 2017   #5
The line graph informs the percentage ...

The following line-graph represents the proportion of petrol expenditure by the citizens of the United States and the United Kingdom regarding three different categories of consumers

Looking atAfter observing the figures, ...

Interestingly , Surprisingly, the group of middle-class (...) witnessed equal number of percentage in the use of Petrolpercentage of petrol consumption for both countries.

Diaz, I felt that you pressed more emphasis over presentation of the stats rather than clarifying the impacts of those figures. That's fine, however explaining the consequences won't hurt if your readers get more into your article and learn something. Mind it and do regard my suggestions.

Best.
Arlen 20 / 40 3
Jan 10, 2017   #6
Hello,

I think your essay already covered the all the criteria. My suggestion is trying to put the comparison in the last paragraph which can make a perfect conclusion of the article.

Also, I would change the description- "three categories of people" into "three different income level". Using "categories" to depict the people sounds a bit weird.

Hope it helps!
bellajane 1 / 3
Jan 17, 2017   #7
United StatesUnited Kingdom -> Need ' the' before these words.
different percentage -> different percentages . But with me , it isn't a good phrase