Unanswered [2]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 3


The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different count



kandetri 1 / 1  
Jun 14, 2025   #1
The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs illustrate four distinct nations' mobile and fixed telephone subscriptions from the period of 2005 to 2015.
Overall, it can be observed that the number of mobile phone subscribers per hundred people underwent considerable increases throughout the timeframe. In contrast, that of fixed phone lines stayed relatively stable for the majority of the period.
Commencing at just over 100 subscribers in 2005, the UK saw a gradual uptick in mobile services users, reaching about 125 registrants by 2015. The Uruguayan and Indian markets also witnessed significant increases in users by the end of the period, going from approximately 40 and less than 10 subscribers to almost 150 and about 75 customers respectively, the former even overtaking the British as the most active mobile userbase. Eritrea conversely did not see any major changes, its mobile phones user count staying below 20 per 100 throughout the spell.
Pertaining to fixed telephone subscriptions, the UK reigned supreme despite a slight, gradual decrease from 2005 to 2015, averaging over 50 active users. Uruguay initially had around 30 subscriptions per hundred people, which dipped slightly before increasing after 2012. Despite having had higher fixed phone subscriptions at first, India's user count was the same as Eritrea's by 2015, at about 5 per 100 inhabitants.

I'm preparing for the IELTS, so any help or feedback would be greatly appreciated. Are there any important mistakes or details that I am making/missing?


  • Test221ACW.png

  • Test222ACW.png
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15682  
Jun 15, 2025   #2
Always indicate the number of images when more than one image is provided for comparison purposes. Remember that the summary overview is not complete if you do not indicate the comparison information. In this case, the comparison information is not just between landline and mobile phones, but also includes 4 countries. The compare and contrast points should pair the 2 highest and 2 lowest countries in each presentation.

Use one paragraph per image for comparison. Do not compress the information into 1 presentation space. It is not only difficult to read, but also shows a weak knowledge of the GRA and TA sections in relation to scoring. There must be at least 1 space line in between the presented paragraphs.
OP kandetri 1 / 1  
Jun 15, 2025   #3
@Holt
Thank you for the valuable feedback.


Home / Writing Feedback / The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different count
ⓘ Need academic writing help? 100% custom and human!
Fill out one of these forms for professional help:

Best Writing Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳