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I live independently, enjoy favorite activities and study the subjects that I would like to learn.


peeraya 1 / 2  
Nov 2, 2014   #1
In my opinion ,I totally agree with the quote" The college years are the best time in a person's life " for three main reasons-gain more knowledges,meeting new people and start and independent ilfe.

Firstly,the college gives the opportunities for studying more knowledge in many favorite subjects ,which are useful in the future career.Moreover I am not forced to study the dislike subjects like in high school years.

Secondly,studying in the college open a chance to meet new people and yield more socialization .There are many people from all over the country ,and knowing new variety people make me understand more about the world and improve my attitude,collaboration with the team and the communication skills which is useful in the future . Besides I can go to much more party after the stress period.

The last but not least,It is the first time to be totally independent from the parents and that is the most important part for me .I have the right to decide and go to sleep anytime they want .I have my own space .

The college period years are the best time for me for sure. I live independently ,enjoy favorite activities and study the subjects that I would like to learn.

gia 7 / 42 3  
Nov 2, 2014   #2
Hi peeraya, to receive feedback on your essay you need to provide a prompt that you are answering and the word limit.
OP peeraya 1 / 2  
Nov 2, 2014   #3
The word limit is 300words it is the toefl test,please score my essay or share the opinion. .Thank you
gia 7 / 42 3  
Nov 2, 2014   #4
Moreover I am not forced to study the dislike subjects like in high school years.

I'm not forced to study the subjects i disliked in high school years.

However, it is not a good idea to say that you disliked your high school subjects.

the college gives the opportunities for studying more knowledge in many favorite subjects
opportunities for gaining a worldly knowledge in various subjects.
gia 7 / 42 3  
Nov 2, 2014   #5
knowing new variety people make me understand more about the world and improve my

say diverse personalities...new variety is not a good English

Besides I can go to much more party after the stress period.
try to omit it or rephrase it. For example, say about how you will get the chance to socialize with many students. It will add positivity to the sentence.

I have the right to decide and go to sleep anytime they want
look what you wrote..

please don't take my comments harshly, but you need to revise the essay to bring it the level of a best TOEFL essay for good scores.I guess this is your 1st draft.Right now its too simple. Get more into the values, opportunities that you will/want to gain when you reach college.Hopefully this will help. all the best.
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Nov 2, 2014   #6
Well, firstly, try to provides some examples in order to contribute to your ideas.
Secondly, if you do not come up with many ideas, then try to make your essay vaguer. In fact, by doing so you will be able to extend your essay quite a bit.


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