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Living in a big city - means more robbers and criminals around


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Sep 28, 2015   #1
Living in a big city has many reasons. in a big city people can make alot of choices for studay and find best works
but in a small cites it is so diffcult for example is no option for study at university big cityes many reich and intelligent people live . There are tidy and big restaurants , cinemas entertainment centers, a lot of parks etc. so people want to move to the city

Servelal cities combination of is called megapolis.For exsample, tokio, newyork etc.
In summer urban people want to relax for one or two monts .some go abroad as atourist and some
others people have a trip to the district around of his relatives .Havever big cities are very noisy and confusing
Many yong people move to big cities for study at unversity and find beter job and live there . But old people
want to move to contryside and relax there
l think living in a big city much better than living in a small town
in a big city you can earn more money than in a small town . In a big city there are many moderen hospitals
when you feel sick and filling pain you can go to the hospital and get a treatment . If you do not have a lot of money thaugh you will die from pain so big city hospitals are very expensive . in the big cities have there are many recording cameras so it is easier to find robbers and criminals than small towns.

phuonganh999 1 / 5 1  
Sep 28, 2015   #2
What is the essay subject? Disadvantages or advantages? Reasons and solutions? I need to know what subject are you writing so I can help you ;)
jasmsu - / 3 1  
Sep 28, 2015   #3
First :
People live in big cities for many reasons. There are many education opportunities, people can find jobs easier, and the overall economic level of the citizens is much higher. Furthermore, it is much more convenient and entertaining as there are many restaurants, cinemas and public parks .

Second:
However in small cities, it is much harder to study at universities as their are limited resources.
hasbi 29 / 42 23  
Sep 28, 2015   #4
Living in a big city has many reasons.inIn a bigthis city people can make alot a lot of choices for studaystudy and find best great works.

Big city-----Repetition

but But in a small cites it is so difficultdifficult for example is no option for study at university big cityes cities many reich rich and intelligent people live . There are tidy and big restaurants , cinemas entertainment centers, a lot of parks etc. so people want to move to the city

for archtect:
please pay attention about spelling or typo each word before upload your writing.
there are many mistake words.
and how to use aposthrophe in paragraf, for instance, using point. there are no space before point.
and Upper case after point.

and carefully and enjoy your writing.
EF_Carol - / 145 39  
Sep 28, 2015   #5
You need to capitalize :

Tokyo, and New York...

Also, I saw a few spelling errors. You need to uses dictionary to check this!

In summer...

You should expand this one sentence paragraph into a full paragraph. I' d say you need at least three sentences to make a paragraph.

Your writing makes a point, but these technical aspects nneed some close attention. Try to form paragraphs that explain your ideas. Does your computer have spellcheck? Use these instruments including a Thesaurus to help you with word choice.

Good start!

ef _ carol
Clare 3 / 3  
Sep 28, 2015   #6
Actually, I find some spelling mistakes, such as Havever big cities however, Many yong people , many young people.
I also think you can talk more about the differences about the big cities and countryside and add more detailed reasons.
OP ARCHTECT 1 / 1  
Sep 29, 2015   #7
dear friends.l wrote first time essay l know l have a lot mistakes and l try correct my mistake


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