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Living in the countryside better in Vietnam


lele1987 2 / 5  
May 22, 2013   #1
I am a new member, and this is the first essay that i try to write and thanks for your comment for my draft.

Nowadays, under the population and climate change, living in the countryside is one of the best choices for people. There are three reasons that why people prefer live in the countryside to a city.

First, countryside has the best environment for people, which is very good for human's health. There are cool air, fresh food and comfortable weather. There are not many vehicles or too much noise and you will have a great time to relax after work.

Second, the relationship between people and neighbor is better in the country side is better than in city. In city, people are too busy to care about it, but in the countryside, there are some different things. Everyone, who lives in the countryside, they are very friendly and they can share with you everything and that is very interesting.

Lastly, in the countryside, with the development of infrastructure in the countryside people can feel comfortable with their life with internet, entertainment center, suppermarket center. They can choose a lot of ways to take care of their health and choose a good school for their children to study

In conclusion, living in countryside is considering as one of the best choices that helps people improve their life.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
May 22, 2013   #2
I think you should add several conjunctions to your essay and use a wide variety of sentence structure because I see that the first two paragraphs contain 3 sentences starting with "There are"
OP lele1987 2 / 5  
May 22, 2013   #3
thanks for your advice!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
May 23, 2013   #4
Nowadays, under the population and climate change, living in the countryside is one of the best choices for people.

Nowadays, the drastic climatic changes together with population explosion, the urban living has become very uncomfortable. Therefore, the countryside is among the best choices for living today.

There are three reasons that why people prefer live in the countryside towithout living in a city.

First, countryside has the best environment for people, which is very good for human's health.

... tell why it is best! rather, you need to talk about its best features.
First, countryside offers highly tranquil and clean environment for the people to live. In other words it provides a healthy living for people without polluted air or water which is very common in urban living.
Helio 2 / 2 1  
May 23, 2013   #5
i think your essay had some problems. The first problem is the length of this essay, it is too short with around 200 words. it should have more than 250 words in the task 2 essay. The second one is that the words and sentences using in this essay are quite simple. You should use more academic words and complex sentences to make it more attractive. Your idea is quite good but it is better if you put some examples into your essay
OP lele1987 2 / 5  
May 23, 2013   #6
Thanks for your advice, i will try to improve this.


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