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IELTS: "Living a healthy lifestyle through eating"


Eating a balanced diet is the most important factor for a healthy life.To what extent do you agree.

Living a healthy lifestyle through eating the right kinds of food is a wealth to a person.I strongly agree that a complete nutritious diet is very important to have a healthy lifestyle.

A balanced diet is mainly comprised
vegatables,fruits,proteins and carbohydrates.These provides vitamins and minerals which are very important for the normal function of the body.Without these,the body is

weak and is not able to perform its duty.Eating the right kind of food prevents malnutrition.

In fact malnutrition could lead to alot of illnesses which is a threat to one's life.A regular intake of a balanced diet helps fight viruses and bacteria from multiplying inside the body and eventually revutalize and restore the health of a person.

Moreover,f a person is always revitalize by the right kinds of food that he eats,this could eventually prolong his life because he will not be easily infected with diseases.In addition,having a long and healthy life could strengthen the relationship of a person to another.This would also encourage other people to eat a healthy diet in order to live long.

To conclude,eating a balanced diet is vital t a long and healthy life so it is very important to eat the right kinds of food regularly.

weak and is not able to perform its duty

vegetables,fruits,proteins and.carbohydrates

May 20, 2014   #2
Moreover,f a person is always revitalize by the right kinds of food

Must be revitalized not revitalize right?

In addition,having a long and healthy life could strengthen the relationship of a person to another

... could strengthen any of his relationship.
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Basically, I think your essay is a little bit short. Maybe provide some more reasonings and example could be better?
Feel free to reply to my feedback :D
May 20, 2014   #4
.I strongly agree that a complete nutritious diet is very important to have a healthy lifestyle.

Well, your prompt says -

Eating a balanced diet isthe most important factor for a healthy life.

... there is a difference between "very important" and "the most important" . When you say "very important" it can be one of the very important factors, but when you say "the most important", then it should come on top of all other important factors... You need to maintain a good alignment between your writing and essay prompt.
May 21, 2014   #7
Ok, you can copy paste the line you want to attend for corrections in the Message block. And if you want to color a particular section of that line, highlight it and click the color (red, blue and green) on the menu bar (top of your Message Block).You can use these tools;

B - Bold
I - Italics
S - Strike off
All these tools you get in the Message block. Hope I answered your question correctly.


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