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Living in a small community allows to build a common bond and safe neighbourhood


ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 13, 2016   #1
In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

In past, most people lived in different situation with most people who live in the modern era because they live in smaller communities. There are some advantages and disadvantages to live in those circumtances.

First of all, in small area societies aware with each other, they know who are their neighbours well. Therefore, they should always give attention to everyone in their area. Second, living in small villages is saver than in cities because these are enough security guard to protect those areas. Hence, there should be hapenend an increasing of crime rate .

However, there also several disadvantages to settle in little villages. First, it is time consuming because people have a social responsible to maintaining their relationship to neighbours, therefore, it can be offend their own bussiness. Secong, people may have limitted acces out of their communities. The reason is they only have few colleagues in other places.

To sum up, living in small communities allows for better society and saver enviromental security. In the opposite, people in a smaller areas have to deal with uncomfortable individual privacy and limitting of the more extended connection.

molly16 9 / 10  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
Hi,

here are my introduction for u :

In past, most people lived in different situation with most people ...

The most significant difference between bygone era and cutting-edge circumstance is related to the communities size and their diversity inside. While others believed that living in a small inhabitant will provide a good relationship, i would argue ..... (in introduction you can give your overview - thesis statement )
kobayakawa07 8 / 13  
Aug 13, 2016   #3
Hi, there are my analysis for you.

3rd paragraph:
-SecongSecond , people may have limited access ...
I think it is better to elaborate your certain idea with detail than give a lot of ideas

Thank you very much. I hope we can give feed back together
adip 12 / 13  
Aug 14, 2016   #4
I am sorry to say you should under surveillance your spelling and the article after OF and please be careful with singular plural
(grammar problem), and it's better when you write in the bygone era than in the past ,in addition than second and also in conclusion, than to sum up,

In past, most people lived in the different situation ...
...to live in those circums tances.

...Second, living in small villages is saf er than in cities
Hence, there should be happ enend an increasing of the crime rate .
...First, it is time- consuming...
therefore, it can be offend their own bussiness . Second , people may have limited access

...for a better society and saver environ mental security.
In the opposite, people in a smaller areas have
and limiting of the more (unclear superlative) extended connection.


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