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Logging industry has had a great impact to the environment as well as terrestrial and aquatic.


Abu_Gosok 2 / 5  
Oct 10, 2016   #1
Logging industry have had a great impact to the environment as well as terrestrial and aquatic. It has caused a pollution both land and water, climate changed, and it also damaged the animals and plants habitat which has made them becoming vulnerability.

The removal of all trees from a large area has bothered the soil that can affect to all species which has relied on forest. Moreover, Forests have myriad of animals and trees that can maintain and inhibit the soil from erosion which was very helpful to trees growth. In addition, Trees supply the natural protection that can fight the pollution which can generate oxygen and absorb the carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. Aside from that trees or plants which lived along the edge of river can stabilize the water flow and decrease the sedimentation.

At last, Forests are essential natural resource and are valuable habitats for wildlife. Removing the trees wipe out the merits and will causes a catastrophe to earth.

dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Oct 10, 2016   #2
Hi Abu!

Logging industry havehas had a great impact to the ...
It has caused a pollution both in land and water, climate changed , and it also (...) habitat which has made them becoming vulnerability.
... has bothered the soil thatwhich can affect to all species which has ...

Aside from that trees or plants which lived along the edge of river ... ( I think this sentence is not complete, it is difficult for me to understand the meaning).

... natural resource and are valuable habitats for wildlife. Removing the trees wipes out the merits and will causes a catastrophe to earth.

Note :
I appreciate in which you try to develop your idea in a complex sentence.
But, in some part, I just do not understand the meaning.
Hopefully, you can change it into a better sentence. Good luck!
OP Abu_Gosok 2 / 5  
Oct 10, 2016   #3
Hiii @dinartika19, Thank you so much for your corrections. I really appreciate it. Yes, for sure, I will try to manage and organise my text more readable.


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