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The logging industry supplies the raw materials for array of products


mawahi bussalam 2 / 4  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
Ilts summary moths; environmental impacts of logging

The logging industry suplies the raw materials for array of products.however,this is without untold harm to the environment.the damage include habitat loss,pollution,and climate change,with the effects spanning the globe from rainforestof central Africa ,southeast asia and south America to northern forests of Canada and Scandinavia.

the form of life was divided to be two both are terrestrial and aquatic which will become endangered as forests vanish .terrestrial is the animal or plant lives in the land and aquatic is the kind of animal or plant lives in the water. Logging can demage in the terrestrial or either .one the other hand ,it can also damage array of animals in underground and other wildlifes

All of that ,the logging forest is one vital of sciene which has to avoid because it can due to various sides feeled down .furthermore ,it becomed victim.

PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
Hello Mawahi,

Your essay tittle need to be fix ilts ielts summary moths month ;environmental ...

however,this is is without untold harm ...

southeast a Asia and south America to northern ...

the form of life was divided to be two both are terrestrial and aquatic which will become endangered ...

it can also damage array (...) and other wildlifes. (put dot of the of sentence)

All of that, all in all, (...) is one vital of sciene scene which has to avoid because it can d...

pay attention in your punctuation

hope it help
dils 20 / 33 2  
Sep 14, 2016   #3
Hi Mawahi,
What a really nice summary to share, as we are learning to get better, this is my humble suggestion four your summary.
1. Please take a look at the way you put punctuation and capital letters.
2. "this is without untold harm to the environment"
"without" and "untold" - both are negation, please pick which one to use.
3. "the form of life was divided to be two both are terrestrial and aquatic"
"two" and "both" - meaning the same, it will be better if you just use "two" and then make a little bit modification with the sentence.

4. The last paragraph is quite confusing actually. Please make sure the idea that you are trying to deliver to the reader.
"logging forest is one vital of sciene"
5. Over all it's better that you pay attention to the cohesion of every sentence, so that the reader can catch the point.
Last but not least, keep writing, keep learning, hope you can improve your English skill.


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