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A lot of advantages for children to gain the bilingual ability as early as possible

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Jan 3, 2018   #1
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

IELTS 9 - TASK 2 essay

It is undoubtedly the case that it may have lots of advantages for children to gain the bilingual ability as early as possible. While I accept this may be a good option for many parents, I believe that there are some disadvantages for learning at the period of primary school time.

On the one hand, being a foreigner language learner at elementary school for children can make them have advantages when in competition with others. Since it has already an international society, there are so many opportunities to use a foreign in our daily life, it is better for pupils to learn a new language as soon as possible. Secondly, it is said that children who received a language training under certain age may learn more effectively than those who start to learn later as the former ones have more potential in memory things. If children begin learning a new language before entering secondary school, they may have more chances to link what they have learnt from the lesson with the daily life experiences.

On the other hand, I believe that there are still some drawbacks if parents urge their children to learn another language at their primary school time. Firstly, children at primary school have just transferred their learning environment from last stage, facing lots of challenges they have not met before and trying to adapt everything new to them. With so many new tasks and the upcoming pressure on academic performance. Learning another new language may be stressful for some pupils. Secondly, the primary school time should be a period which pupils can explore their interests in different subjects. From my perspective, it would be better for children to learn a second language at secondary school. At then, children know about what they eager for and are able to deal the stress from their academic performance well.

My conclusion is that there may be some good points to learn a second language at primary school. However more drawbacks come after that may result in influence of studying performance and the happy childhood.

Holt [Contributor] - / 6,899 1718  
Jan 3, 2018   #2
Kristy, I don't think that you are familiar with the discussion requirements, per paragraph of the task 2 essay. The opening paragraph is used to score your TA abilities. That is why the first paragraph requires you to present your own understanding of the discussion topic, based on the original presentation, as well as your ability to follow English instructions. That is why you are supposed to paraphrase the first paragraph of the essay. The best way to have done this is something like this:

The education experts are convinced that unfamiliar languages should be taught to youngsters in elementary school. While other schooling authorities think that teaching foreign languages would be more effective when done in high school. I believe that it is disadvantageous to study the unfamiliar languages in primary school for a few reasons.

Remember, the first paragraph is all about proving your English comprehension skills. Which is why it has to be presented in a specific manner with clear requirements. The example I provided above is one of the various ways that you can develop for this sort of presentation.

By the way, the prompt contains the word "or" in the portion about the advantage "or" disadvantage. The presence of that word indicates that you can only discuss one side of the essay topic using 3 separate reasons. Every reason gets its own paragraph. So in the second paragraph where you present a first and second reason, you should have presented only one reason per paragraph. That way, you fully utilize the body of paragraphs in the supporting evidence manner that it was meant to do. Each paragraph needs to be completed in 5 sentences that indicate a topic sentence, one reason, one supporting explanation, one example, then the transition sentence for the next paragraph. That is how you gain the maximum potential for each paragraph that you write.

Another thing, please make sure that you do not continue the discussion of a new reason in your closing paragraph. That is meant to accomplish the following only:

1. Restate the discussion topic
2. Present your opinion in a new manner
3. Summarize the reasons that you discussed in the essay (use 2 sentences if necessary)
4. Deliver a closing sentence.

I won't focus on your language issues as the moment because you were not able to present an accurate discussion based on the prompt requirements anyway. I would like you to first focus on understanding the various methods that the Task 2 essays ask the test takers to discuss the prompts. You can do that by reading the various examples of these essays on this forum. Once you understand what each prompt requires you to discuss and how, then we can focus on improving your English written language skills.

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