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IELTS TASK 2 - Nowadays, a lot of charities and organizations have set up a number of days name


madmoiselle 21 / 33 5  
May 5, 2016   #1
Nowadays, a lot of charities and organizations have set up a number of days name the special day to attract people's attention, like National Children's day, National Non-smoking Day. Why do they have to do so, and what will the effects be?

These days, many charities and organizations have created the special day's name, such as National Children's Day and National Non-smoking Day to appeal societies' attention. There are some reasons and impacts of such these special days, which I will explain further in this essay.

There are some purposes, why charities and organizations have set up a special day. Take, National Children's Day for instance, it is a day, that aim to emphasis the societies to take care of children. In fact, quite a few children nowadays become the victim of their family or teacher, such as sexual abuse, human trafficking and so forth. Therefore, with this special day, the charities or organization could give the knowledge to societies regarding the children's right, and how to treat them with well-behaved in order to prevent children abuse. Furthermore, with such these special days, the charities and organizations are able to contribute to the society actively. Thus, for these reasons, the names of special days are created.

In addition, the impacts of these special days could invite the societies to be more pay attentions upon issues occurring these days. Special days campaign that arranged by some organizations and charities about what they fight upon certain issues, will influence people to be better individuals. Non-smoking Day for example, this special day, will enhance people awareness towards the dangerous of smoking to health. Hence, effect of the special days can repair moral values in societies as well.

In conclusion, it is clear that, the name of special days have contributed to societies positively. These special days possess an own purpose as reflected in the day's name itself. With host of special day's name created, it shows that there are still, people in this world that care towards each other.

Maya29 14 / 18 14  
May 5, 2016   #2
Hi Rere,

It is nice to read your essay. You write it quite well, however, please let me give some suggestions to you.

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I find you use the words "special days" and "societies" more than 5 times. It is better if you use another words like : unusual days, good days, great days, the people around, etc.)

Here you have it. I hope those can be useful for you. Keep writing..:)
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
May 20, 2016   #3
Hi Rere, with this particular essay, I must say that I enjoyed reading it, aside from the very minor remarks contributed by one of the EF ambassadors, this essay is somehow written in a way that you give emphasis to your ideas as well to the point that you want to convey to your readers.

Furthermore, you were also able to create that alternative source of information that brought the essay to a certain level, the only thing that I would like you to remember is, to have that confidence in writing. As you can see you were able to come up with a good read essay, something that showcased your writing technique and something that made your writing go direct to the point of answering the prompt.

Overall, it's one of those essays that you don't really have to think about, you just have to let your ideas flow and it will transpire in the essay that you currently writing. I hope this insights help and should you need further assistance, do let us know so we can be of assistance.


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