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A lot of folks argue that the level of violence action between teenagers have increased


hasbi 29 / 42 23  
Sep 30, 2015   #1
Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some Psychologists claim that the basic reasons for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


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currently, lots of folks argue that the level of violence action between teenagers have increased. Regards on indicates of some psychologists, it is occurred due to the children never get social and emotion learning from school and their relatives. This essay is partly agree with the issue, I am firm believe that the main factor of violent action appear in around the children is an environment affects. This essay will explain related to this.

It is a common fact that the number of violent crime among young children increased sharply. This is because the content of learning is rarely to teach them about social life and how to respect to each other. Taking example in Somalia, one of the unsafe countries in the world, the number of crime action in this area growing up annually, particularly teenager. Such the robber cases witnessed more than five cases per day. In fact, most of them never achieve knowledge about social life in their school even in their family. As a result, it is definitely that they do not understand about living harmonious in society and solely consider that fight is the great way deal with their matters.

However, there are several factors cause violent actions between young teenagers. The environment playing an immense role to influences children's behavior. Teenager is the period of life when person effort to find their identity, they are deceivable and can be affected. Firstly, while bad environment where they life is not definitely influenced all teenagers become bad behavior, predominantly of them following this conditions. In additions, teenagers who live such in thief area could follow the habit of folks there became a thief. Also, several obligation of government related to youngsters matters are not suitable include forced them to develop their creativity.

To conclude, although criminal actions of people under 18 age group is less attention about social and emotion learning from their school and family. I believe that environment where they live play an essential part how they behave every day. Government should pay attention for these matters especially for youngsters for the next generation.

Samuelsam123 12 / 46 20  
Sep 30, 2015   #2
Hi Hasbi ,

Regards on indicates of some psychologists
Try Writing into
Some psychologists claimed / states / points out that / think that /

it is occurred due to the children never...

Never Write This !! in fact don't think about it. It lowers the standard of the essay in the marking schemeThis essay is partly agree with the issue So is this : This essay will explain related to this

I am firm believe= I st rongly agree

I get what u mean here , but this sentence has some mistakes
appear in around the children 's
is an environment affects

This is because the content of learning is rarely toteach themabout social life and how to respect to each other.

1. the moral values
2. distilled into them


about living harmonious in society and solely consider that fight is the great way deal with their matters.

1.the importance of living in harmony
2. always blinded by rage and anger, ignoring the most rudimentary principles of negotiating.


The environmentplayingplays an immense role to the influences of the children's behavior.

Teenager is the period of life when person effort to find their identity, they are deceivable and can be affected.
I get you however it can be written like this.
Teenage life if often portrayed as the consequence of their upbringing in their childhood. Disrespectful and rebellious teenagers are often the result of having a childhood of total ignorance or easy-go-lucky .

I don't quite understand you in these two sentences .

-Firstly, while bad environment where they life is not definitely influenced all teenagers become bad behavior, predominantly of them following this conditions.

-Also, several obligation of government related to youngsters matters are not suitable include forced them to develop their creativity.

although criminal actions of people under 18 age group is less attention shooting up. about social and emotion learning from their school and family

you really need to read up more in these kind of essay topics . read more newspapers would be a great choice.
irhame 52 / 50 25  
Oct 1, 2015   #3
To conclude, although criminal actions of people under 18 age group isare less attention about social and emotion learning from their school and family. I believe that environment where they live plays an essential part to control how they behave every day. Where possible ,Government should pay attention for these matters, especially for youngsters for the next generation.


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