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Love and friendship - the best things in life are free.


carmspinto 1 / 2 1  
Oct 25, 2013   #1
Nowadays people think that the best things in life can be only buy with money instead of thinking that the best things can be reach by ourselves. many things are free in this life, so we have to joy our precious moments. we agree with the statement "the bst things in life are free" for example love, friendship,family, health, the love of God,etc. for many reasons.

Many people in this world have love, love is an extraordinary feeling that each people feels for another person. Also with love we can do best things in our lives for example the love that parents feel about their sons and daughters it's a free thing. People enjoy loving because they feel happy with that special person also they feel comfortable and they that, that special person will be always with her or him no matter what happens.

Other best thing in life that is free is our friendship. all people need friends to share their secrets and to have support from others. Also you have fun with them and you share moments that you will never forget. another thing is our health, in the life health is the most important thing. what is the value of money if you don't have a healthy life style.

At the same time , we have great moments in our lives, we also can go through bad experiences that might make us remember forever. When better things arrive to our life, we live them no matter what, you just live that special occasion ever happened and for free because it's our convinience.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 26, 2013   #2
Nowadays people think that the best things in life can be only buy with money instead of thinking that the best things can be reach by ourselves.

Nowadays, many people think that best things in life can be achieved if you have money and ignore the fact that best things can be achieved through our perseverance and dedication.

we agree with the statement "the bst things in life are free" for example love, friendship,family, health, the love of God,etc. for many reasons.

Why "we"? You need to express your opinion and therefore you should use the word "I"
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Oct 27, 2013   #3
Many people in this world have love, love is an extraordinary feeling that each people feels for another person.

"each people" is wrong. People means a collection of men/women and therefore it is a plural word. So it should be "each person".

Also, I like if you changed the first part of this sentence. For me. it does not make much sense. You may say;
Everybody needs love to enjoy life. Love is an extraordinary feeling that can heel many wounds be them physical or emotional. It is a very pleasing experience that provides people with great enjoyment.

Also with love we can do best things in our lives, for example the love that parents feel about their sons and daughters it's a free thing.

What do you mean by "free thing"? Also, what's the connection between the first and the second parts of your sentence? If you say that love helps people to do their best, then your example should support that point.


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