Hi, Imho .. i am tremendously enthusiastic about your essay here, nevertheless let me give you a few correction here.
Could you show task from this essay properly if this is from a task writing task ?
Nowadays, there is an increase in jobless rate in some countries. While some people believe that it can reduce a crime and improve nation's income, others argue that companies cannot pay the employer's payment due to a rise of staff member.I personally believe that it is not good idea.may you can put some statement about positive and negative of jobless people in your opinion due i cannot find your statement about them here
The first positive of making unemployed take a job is how it can reduce a crime rate. Result shows that almost all criminals are unemployed people in several countries.One of the alternatives that government can take to diminish a crime is by giving them a job.could you explain why government have consideration to tackle this problem ?
in my point of you, in the negative side you need to put two negative sides here to present a balance view.
i hope my corection can help you to improve your writing.
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