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Against Lowering Drinking Age to 18


Nazaninrp 2 / 3  
Nov 20, 2012   #1
This is the essay I wrote about "lowering drinking age to18". I am looking for some feedback before I submit it.

In modern society, pleasure drinking has been an increasing problem for quite some time. As a result various countries and governments have tried to tackle underage drinking by increasing the drinking age. In United States citizens know that the legal drinking age for alcohol is twenty-one. The controversy of whether or not the drinking age should be lowered to eighteen in the United States has been an ongoing issue. It should at least stay where it is now because lowering the drinking age cause It would risk more lives and wrecks, alcohol is a poison to the body and it damages the developing brains of adolescents and young adults, and by lower the drinking age the younger people who are under 18 think it's ok to start drinking.

At any age, getting wasted is harmful for the person doing it, and to others. People that are eighteen are still around the idea of adulthood and dependant, even though they don't think so.

Being responsible is a big step in life and many are not there yet. Most teenagers are not living in their own house, making their own money and paying their own way, let alone know how to drink responsibly. Eighteen year olds are still dependant on their parents. Their drinking causes much worry, stress, more liability and more issues in life. The drinking age is 21 because that's the age when most people have matured enough to realize the negative effects of alcohol and they are old enough to be able to handle the responsibility.

People who are younger than twenty one, they don't have the knowledge gained from experience to behave responsibly about drinking. There isn't enough responsibility when you are younger, and one of the characteristics of maturing is becoming an adult it's. insane to give the kids their cars and their freedom to drink right around the same time. the percentage of deaths affiliated with adolescents and alcohol and driving are significant.

Another effect that lowing drinking age cause is to subject teen body to an addictive substance. They younger they start, they higher the rate of addiction would get. Alcohol damages full grown brains, but it's effects of a developing brain can be even worse. The body chemistry in younger people is not able to adjust and process the alcohol. Alcohol has an effect on the brain that is not good developing mind. An eighteen year old is not full grown and of course their liver and brain won't take that damage so easily.

Lowering the drinking age to 18 would bring the alcohol into the high school social scene even more than it already is and would make it easier for minors like 14 to 17 to get a hold of alcohol from an older friend At 18, teenagers believe they are responsible enough for alcohol, but at the same time there is also a 16 yrs old who believe the same thing. The truth about being young is they believe they can do anything. And going younger, they're definitely not mature enough. with a drinking age of 18 underage drinkers tend to be 12-13 year olds while with a drinking age of 21 the underage drinkers tend to be 16-17.

Most people develop their drinking habits when they are in college. nobody teaches them how to drink responsibility. People should start to educate their friends, families, and kids about alcohol abuse and teach them how to drink safely and gradually in moderation. Since teen drivers are new to driving, the hope is to keep them out of the sauce for a few years until they are older and their judgement is able to catch up with their level of freedom. Making accidents less frequent, and hopefully less deadly. If society will follow the logic these facts present, it becomes clear that the drinking age of 21 should remain in affect.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Nov 23, 2012   #2
I think you better use "consuming alcohol"

The controversy of whether or not the drinking age should be lowered to eighteen in the United States has been an ongoing issue.

It should at least stay where it is now because lowering the drinking age may cause It would risk more lives and wrecksfor health , alcohol is a poisonnot good for healthto the body and it damages the developing brains of adolescents and young adults, and by lowering the drinking age the younger people who are under 18 think it's ok to start drinking.

This sentence is very long and make the reader tired of reading it. Better use shorter sentences that have better clarity.

Eighteen year olds are still dependant on their parents.

-------- Good

Most people develop their drinking habits when they are in college.

---------- I agree.... at least for Asis :D

If society will follow the logic these facts present, it becomes clear that the drinking age of 21 should remain in affect.effect

Effect and affect are two different words with different meanings; For example;
It affects my way of thinking
Its effects are tremendous.
OP Nazaninrp 2 / 3  
Nov 27, 2012   #3
Dear Dumi thank you for your help :)


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