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IELTS essay main benefit of international cooperation


jenny45 4 / 8 1  
Nov 13, 2012   #1
help!!!!! I am going to take ielts exam this week, please give me some advice~~~~

Topic Some think that the main benefit of international cooperation is in the protection of the environment, while others think that the main benefit is in the world business. Discuss both view and give your opinion

When it comes to the advantages brought by cooperation in international circumstances. People hold divergent views. Some allege that the primary value is in environmental conservation; others contend that world business is the chief beneficiary. In this essay, I am going to explore these two sides first before presenting my personal understanding.

Obviously, collaboration among countries is conducive to set up an unified organization which can implement relevant policies and enact environmental protection laws to tackle with environmental problems. Common sense tells us that environment issues --- global warming, holes in Ozone layer and water contamination---are not confined to one particular country or region, which means countries are expected to join hands together such as enforcing laws of prohibition on cutting trees and waste disposal to alleviate the aforementioned problems from a global scale. Therefore, in this respect, international cooperation brings benefits to dealing with environment problems.

However, in no circumstance, could business interest be neglected. A case in this point is Gac-Toyota, which is a Sino-Japan joint venture car manufacturer, augmenting its productivity and cutting down the production cost by cooperating with others---successfully utilizing the china's low price labor and Japan's cutting-edge technology. Hence, it is argued that cross-country cooperate brings profits in economic domain.

On the whole, it is subjective to say that the main benefit is environment conservation or world business, since the both benefit enormously from collaboration in global scale. To my way of think, it is well-advice to boost international cooperation, considering the win-win situation formed by it.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Nov 13, 2012   #2
When it comes to the advantages brought by cooperation in international circumstances(no fullstop here)Pp eople hold divergentdifferent views.

The word "when" is a subordinating conjunction that combines two events, ideas, happenings etc.

Some allegeassert that the primary value of international cooperation is in the efforts of environmental conservation; others contendcontest that world business is the chief beneficiary.

In this essay, I am going to explore these two sides first before presenting my personal understanding.

---------- the reader anyway expects and knows that you to do this. So better you indicate him what your opinion on this theme at this point so that he would be ready to follow you why you think that way. For example:

In my view, I think that international cooperation benefit both these aspects equally.----------- this is something important for the reader to know to follow your forthcoming paras.
OP jenny45 4 / 8 1  
Nov 14, 2012   #3
Thanks a lot ~dumi
Inspired2012 4 / 20 6  
Nov 14, 2012   #4
The general idea to the essay question is greatly pointed out in your essay, good job! I intend to have the same corrections shown in jenny45's reply. Other than that its brilliant. When is your exam? Mine is on the 24th. Good luck to us ;))
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Nov 14, 2012   #6
@ Inspired2012 ;
Hey... what do you mean? .... I want all of you go have great scores and am really looking forward to :D
princedynasty 15 / 57 4  
Nov 14, 2012   #7
Your essay have specific ideas and examples. I'm just wondering how we can think up such interesting ideas within only 40mins. :D(coz I haven't taken the Ielts before)

conducive to SETTING up
in no circumstance, could business interest be neglected=> UNDER no circumstances COULD business....
A case in this point is Gac-Toyota, which is a Sino-Japan joint venture car manufacturer, augmenting its productivity and cutting down the production cost by cooperating with others---successfully utilizing the china's low price labor and Japan's cutting-edge technology.=> augments/augmented ...cuts/cut...

Cross country COOPERATION
ENVIRONMENTAL conservation
ON a global scale
my way of THINKING
WELL-ADVISED


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