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The Main Feature to Get Happy Life is Depending to The Around Factor of Self


yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 19, 2016   #1
Happy is the most important and main feature which be necessary for life today and the next too. Some people be happy because anythings, mainly job factors. However, the area where someone living or working and also there are people who cherish with us which other factors is more important too.

If someone has a job which they love doing, the people will be happy. The life always has many jobs that must be finished very well. On the other hand, some people have to enjoy it in order to be happy. For the example, every day, the students have some tasks, such as science, math, english etc, finally we must do it with the best way to get high score else. If the students loving do this task, they will finish the work successfully and be satisfy. Furthermore, if the students unsatisfied with the job, they will be stress and more lazy to do else.

The other factors are more important in order to someone be happy that are the environment where they living or working, and also there are people who cherish with us. The surrounding of life or work has main factor that make the someone be happy. In my view, the area will give many influences, well positive or negatif impact for someone get their happy. If our area is not support, we will not finish the task very well. The opposite said that if the area is espouse us, we will give the best task else. Furthermore, the people are main important factor which need by needed by someone to be happy. The people who cherish with us will give positive energy for our self and the our brain respon with it, finally we can be happy automatically.

The conclusion is many factors will make some people be happy which depend to love something that we do, the place where are life or work, and people who support us.

faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Nov 19, 2016   #2
HELLO YURIKE, GUESS ME WHO? HAHA

Happy HAPPINESS is the most important and THE main feature which be IS necessary for life today TODAY'S LIFE and the next too IN THE FUTURE.

1. HAPPY ---> ADJECTIVE. MAKE SURE IT BECOMES NOUN---> HAPPINESS

2. DON'T FORGET TO PUT ARTICLE "THE"

3. LIFE TODAY ---> INAPPROPRIATE.

4 NEXT TOO ---> UNCLEAR MEANING ---> CHANGES INTO WORD THAT CAN MAKE THE READER CLEARLY UNDERSTAND

I suggest you must study grammar again Yurike, Keep fight, see you in Europe ^^
Anna94 47 / 56 3  
Nov 19, 2016   #3
HELLO YURIKE, HERE ARE MY SUGGESTIONS FOR YOU..

Happy (HAPPINESS ) is the most (...) which (IT BECOMES ) be necessary for life today and the next too (it is better if you use FOR THE FUTURE ). Some people be (ARE ) happy

... where someone IS living or (...) are people who ARE cherish with us which other factorsisARE more important too.

... which they love TO DOdoing , the people will be happy. The life always has many ...
For the example, every day, (...) best way to get THE high score else . If the students lovingLOVE do thisTHESE taskS, they will finish ...

... important in order to MAKE someone be happy (...) where they ARE living orworking, and also there are people who cherish with us.
... main factor that make the someone be happy. I
... give many influences, wellEITHER positive or negatif impactS for someone TO get their happy (HAPPINESS ). If our area isDOES not support US, we will not finish ...

... important factor which need by needed by (NEED EACH OTHER TO BE HAPPY ) someone to be happy.

The conclusion is many factors will make some people be ... (YOU SHOULD PARAPHRASE THE PROMPT SHORTLY HERE THEN COMBINE WITH THE ANSWERS OF THE QUESTION THAT YOU HAVE EXPLAINED )

NOTICE: SUBJECT VERB AGREEMENT, MAKING A CORRECT SENTENCE, USING VERB IN THE SENTENCE, WORD CHOICE.

Keep practising

GLUCK ^^~
Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Nov 28, 2016   #4
hello yuri.. this is my suggestion for you
Happy(happiness) is the most important and the main feature which beare necessary for life ...
Some people can be happy because of anythings because ==> sentence + because +sentence , mainly job factors.
... also there are people who cherish with us which other factors is more important too.[make this sentence easy to understand ==> conjunction like which /that/ need 2 sentence or two subject and 2 verbs in certain case and you should pay more attention about it


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