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IELTS Task 1: The main features of Global Water Usage in Brazil and Congo

nuradiapuspa 11 / 25  
Feb 22, 2017   #1
The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

water utilization numbers

The line graph shows information about water utilization in three sectors around the world from 1990 to 2000 and measured by kilometer cubic. Overall, it can be seen that water use was increase in all three fields, with agriculture aims had the most significant rise. The water use for agriculture sector stood at about 500 km3 in 1990, then it rose dramatically by around 2500 km3 in 2000. In addition, the water consumption for industrial and domestic aims moved up to 1000 km3 and 200 km3 respectively in the end of period.

The table provides comparison of water use in Brazil and Congo in term of their population size, area of irrigation, and water consumption per person in 2000. Generally, Brazil was at the higher amount among all categories than Congo. Brazil, which had 176 million people, allocated 26.500 km2 of it's area for irrigation land. Moreover, each Brazilian use 359 m3. Congo, which had fewer population than Brazil, managed 100 km2 for irrigated land. Congolese used only 8 m3 of water per person.

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Feb 22, 2017   #2
Nuradia, the summary overview of the essay is not presented at all. The opening statement should have first indicated the kinds of illustration provided, what each illustration would be discussing, and how the two charts are related. Without that summary information, even though you wrote more than 150 words, your task accuracy score would be extremely affected.

While the separated discussion of the charts worked well for the essay in terms of the paragraph presentation, the fact that you were not able to merge a paragraph topic presentation for the charts in a fourth and final paragraph leaves the essay less than completely presented and discussed. It proves that aside from the clearly available information in the charts, there was no attempt on your part to analyze the illustrations farther than what you could visibly see. You did not try to study the chart for extra information to be presented in the summary essay. The presentation of analyzed information, based upon the present information would have raised the score consideration for your essay.

Based upon the problems that I enumerated, I am very sad to say that the essay cannot gain more than a score of 4 overall.

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