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'make friends more easily?' - Persuasive essay for school uniforms

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Apr 28, 2012   #1
We have to write a persuasive essay for my Honors English class. Me and a friend thought of an idea to both do the topic but do it from different perspectives. I'm not totally finished yet, but I would like to know if it's good so far before I finish it completely and have to start over. And also if you guys have any ideas as to what else I could add to it.

Statistics show that schools who have adopted uniforms, have seen a drop in all around problems at the school.
"A small study by Kelly DeLong (Ohio State University thesis, 1998) linked uniforms to imoroved student outcomes. She found 'there was a significant difference in reading, mathematics, and citizenship tests between the school with the uniforms and the school without the uniforms.'" It has been proven that schools with uniforms has seen a rise in grades with students. With their minds set more on what's going on in class other than worrying about what everyone looks like, is causing them to pay more attention and take in more information. In addition to the rising in grades, there has been a major rise with behavior.

Results from a survey given to parents and teachers regarding the use of uniforms in the school has shown that uniforms have given students a sense of fitting in better and security. Without the chance to be able to make fun of someone because of the way they are dressed, students are able to fit in with people who would've normally not even had anything to do with them. Being able to make friends more easily can boost the student's self confidence and ability to succeed.

ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Apr 29, 2012   #2
I have some ideas about the topic that may help
1) Uniform is a social leveler
2) it creates a type of discipline in schools that drives up the schools' standards
3) Uniform prepares students for their future's lives
4) It improves the students' sense of belonging to their schools
OP skye_malyn 1 / 1  
Apr 29, 2012   #3
Thank you very much! That really helped!

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