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Making noise as much as you can!! Discuss two viewpoints :)


ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 673 148  
Jan 23, 2015   #1
I think IELTS examiners have run out of interesting topics. What the hell was this topic I just wrote about :)))) anyway, it is what it is, any suggestions are welcomed :) thanks everyone in advance

Topic: Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.

Every night I sleep at 2:00 am and wake up at 5:00 am thanks to noisy neighbours, who speak, listen to music loudly and run parties at their flats. This situation can be the problem of many people in their daily routine life. The issues like this have introduced the idea that noise produced by an individual must be restricted, even though this opinion has its own critics. I am also in agreement with the former group, although for making a better conclusion over the matter, the considerations of both sides of the debates must be examined first.

Those who proclaim the assertion of producing as much noise a person wish to make connect the issue to individual's rights. They believe each person is free and entitled to do whatever he/she prefers to do. It is believed that applying some restrictions of any kind on the right of people in making noise may be extended to limitation of other personal rights. In fact, when a small issue like making noise is banned, other freedoms at greater degrees, like freedom of expression, would gradually be violated, since people of the society who accept restrictions in the name of rules and respecting other people's right, they would admit any other limitations.

The other group of people, however, consider a red-line for freedom of every single person. They believe that individuals can do anything freely, so that they do not invade other people's rights. For instance, if a person listens to music disturbingly loud, he/she takes the right of resting from his/her neighbours. In addition, if we think about the matter more deeply, we will find out that the noises that everybody makes can intensify the issue of noise pollution. Noise pollution, stemming from different sources, ranging from cars' horns to loud songs played on sound systems, not only immensely impact people, but also negatively influences animals. For example, bats' hunting capabilities rely on their hearing sense and under influence of noise pollution their lives would be jeopardized as they cannot hunt and will die of starvation.

In conclusion, although some people try to naively support their opinion of making noise without limitation, I believe that respecting other people's rights and preserving the environment we live in are more important elements that allow us to control the noise made by people. Thus, if no rule is enacted for this issue, both residential rights and wildlife will encounter to serious danger.

vangiespen - / 4,140 1449  
Jan 23, 2015   #2
Another well written essay Ahmad. You have successfully presented your ideas in a coherent but highly serious manner. This essay topic is all about having fun and using informal English language to drive your point across. So there are some instances, which I will be pointing out to you, wherein you could used some relaxed English vocabulary instead. Instances such as:

Those who proclaim the assertion of producing as much noise a person wish to make connect the issue to individual's rights.

- Those who reserve the right to make noise and party all night do so on the basis that they are simply exercising their basic human right to have funm sadly, as the expense of the peace and quiet of others.

In fact, when a small issue like making noise is banned, other freedoms at greater degrees, like freedom of expression, would gradually be violated, since people of the society who accept restrictions in the name of rules and respecting other people's right, they would admit any other limitations.

- They believe that when a small issue like noise is controlled ...
- Don't use the word banned, the prompt never indicated a ban on noise, just noise control. Make sure to use the correct terms because interchanging of terms can and will affect the message the essay is trying to deliver.

The other group of people, however, consider a red-line for freedom of every single person.

- Taking into consideration though that all freedoms come with certain limitations, it is not unfair nor discriminatory for other people, such as myself, to advocate for a control on noise.

I agree with you though, the review examiners must be running out of topics for your IELTS tests. Either that or they just want to give you guys a break from the nose bleed causing thesis topics they have been throwing at you guys lately :-)
OP ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 673 148  
Jan 23, 2015   #3
Thank you Luisa for the suggestions; really useful as usual. I think it takes a century for me to write a sentence like what you wrote :))
vangiespen - / 4,140 1449  
Jan 23, 2015   #4
It is only hard at the start Ahmad. The more practice that you get in essay writing, and the more widely read you become, the easier it will be for you to immediately develop usable and acceptable essay answers. I have had decades of practice at this first as a student then after graduation, due to my line of work as a researcher and writer so writing these essays are second nature to me already. It is also because of that exposure that I am able to better help review your essays :-) The ease of writing essays cannot be developed overnight. Neither can you speed up its development. The skill requires constant practice, constant reading, memorization in order to develop to a seemingly natural level of writing. Don't feel bad, be too hard on yourself, or expect too much from yourself at the start. You will eventually get to the level that you hope to achieve. Just keep at it and don't give up :-)


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