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TOEFL: Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility


MarianaS 5 / 14 8  
Sep 11, 2014   #1
Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, is such relationship good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Being a pet owner is not mere a tribute to family traditions or satisfaction of children's whims. Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility for its health, entertainment, as well as happiness. Therefore, such a responsibility differs little from a mother's care for a child. However, owning a pet eventually leads to lots of personal benefits. As far as I am concerned, attachment to any domestic animal is good due to a number of reasons.

First of all, owning a pet is beneficial for one's health. Indisputably, a domestic animal needs to be walked outdoors every day. Therefore, following your pet's habit on regular bases definitely keeps you in good shape and actually promotes good health. In addition, experts point out that maintaining close relationship with a pet lowers bloody pressure and lessens anxiety. In order to prove whether or not this statement is true, my grandmother has been taken care for the abandoned cat. Now she forgot about heavy vascular sickness from which she has suffered for many years.

Furthermore, people who have close relation with their domestic animals, are less likely to loss their property because of various reasons. Needless to say, dogs always alert when a thief sneaks into the owner's house. Moreover, researchers suggest that pets are able to anticipate natural disasters or fire. It is the easiest to illustrate this point with the real life example. Once, my dog's barking prevented destruction of my neighbor's house by fire.

In a nutshell, close relations with domestic animals provide one with a lot of benefits, including but not limited to better health and protection of personal property. Consequently, I believe that close relationship with pets, or treating them as family members is definitely useful.

Thank you all in advance!

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 11, 2014   #2
Mariana, you are showing such remarkable improvement with every essay. Your grasp of the prompt provided and your method of discussion is betting better with every paper you have us review :-) That said, there are still some things you should note in order to polish this essay.

Being a pet owner is not mere a tribute to family traditions or satisfaction of children's whims. Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility for its health, entertainment, as well as happiness. Therefore, such a responsibility differs little from a mother's care for a child. However, owning a pet eventually leads to lots of personal benefits. As far as I am concerned, attachment to any domestic animal is good due to a number of reasons.

- Before you enter into this part of your statement, you should first present reasons as to why families create personal relationships with pets that bring them to treat the pet more as a family member than anything else. It will be a fitting opening statement that will be followed up by this statement as a thesis statement.

First of all, owning a pet is beneficial for one's health. Indisputably, a domestic animal needs to be walked outdoors every day. Therefore, following your pet's habit on regular bases definitely keeps you in good shape and actually promotes good health. In addition, experts point out that maintaining close relationship with a pet lowers bloody pressure and lessens anxiety. In order to prove whether or not this statement is true, my grandmother has been taken care for the abandoned cat. Now she forgot about heavy vascular sickness from which she has suffered for many years.

- Don't forget to present the opposing side of this statement. Otherwise your discussion will lack a balanced point of view. Always argue the opposing side as well.

Furthermore, people who have close relation with their domestic animals, are less likely to loss their property because of various reasons. Needless to say, dogs always alert when a thief sneaks into the owner's house. Moreover, researchers suggest that pets are able to anticipate natural disasters or fire. It is the easiest to illustrate this point with the real life example. Once, my dog's barking prevented destruction of my neighbor's house by fire.

- This is true. But dogs are territorial by nature. So even if they are not treated as family members, they will guard their area. Don't forget, that is an opposing argument that you have to discuss in this statement in order to prove your own statement true.

In a nutshell, close relations with domestic animals provide one with a lot of benefits, including but not limited to better health and protection of personal property. Consequently, I believe that close relationship with pets, or treating them as family members is definitely useful.

- Good statement. But it can still be polished with other reasons. Try to talk to other people who have pets that they treat as family members and use their personal input as part of your closing statement.
OP MarianaS 5 / 14 8  
Sep 12, 2014   #3
Louisa, I am very grateful for your support! Frankly, it takes me more time to write an essay than it is allowed on TOEFL. However, I hope, this problem is temporal, and after 185 essays written by me and revised on EssayForum my writing skills will be almost perfect:)


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