Hi Eka!
Here are my feedbacks to your writing summary.
Through mobile phone makes people seems possible to find out many new activities.
...our mobile networks provideroffered .
...for several times but the firm company rejected -> alternatives:[/b]refused, declined , although the company granted it a few months later.
...it is important for him because it concerns his live.
...what had been done by himself .
...to secure their privacy.
My highlight to you: pay attention to the use of pronoun (my, your, his, her, their etc. always used together with noun : his book , while mine, him, her, etc usually placed after verb or preposition and stand alone).
Well done! Keep writing and break a leg.
hi,,,
Though Mobile phone makes people ...
Malte has an experience which asking his data ...
He said that he hashad requested it for several ...
...it is important for him because it concerns his live.
...to secure their privacy