TED SUMMARY 11 : The World English Mania - Jay Walker
Manias can be expressed by various ways. In some cases, football maniacs, for example, show their emotion by screaming when their favorite group beats the opponent group. It similarly appears when teenagers enjoy a live concert, like the Beetle band, even they can cry after watching their favorite band performance. Interestingly, there is a novel trend around the world right now. Have your ever heard English manias? In China, many students are exerted to be expert in English. Did you know, why? The simple answer is because English offers to get better live, job, and education. English as the world second language helps us to have a wider global conversation in various global issues such as climate change, poverty, hunger, and disease. It is commonly known that the world has a universal language. If math is a language of science, then music is a language of motions. Furthermore, English becomes a language of problem solving and represents hope for better future so, English manias is a good trend as the globe has a common language to solve a common problem.
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- Manias can be expressed
bythrough various ways.
- In some cases, football maniacs, for example, ... (try to think again, "some" is equal to "more than one". Your example is only one)
- ..like the
Beetle bandBeatles , even ...
- In China, many students are
exertedsuggested / forced to be expert in English.
- Did you know why? (comma is unnecessary)
- The simple answer is because English offers
to geta better livelife , job, and education.
- English as the World's second language helps us to have...
- ...then music is a language of
- Furthermore, English becomes a
language of problem solving language and it represents hope for better future. (stop, new sentence) soThus , English manias is a goodpositive trend as the... ("good" is "A1" level word. Positive is "B1" which is higher.)
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Hello, this is my correction for you. thanks
Maniacs can be expressed ...
..., for example, shows their emotion by screaming ...
In China, a lot of students are exerted ...
... English offers to get better live , job, and education.
English become the world second language ...