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Manias can be expressed by various ways. Have your ever heard about English mania?


abangabul93 15 / 27  
Nov 14, 2016   #1
TED SUMMARY 11 : The World English Mania - Jay Walker

Manias can be expressed by various ways. In some cases, football maniacs, for example, show their emotion by screaming when their favorite group beats the opponent group. It similarly appears when teenagers enjoy a live concert, like the Beetle band, even they can cry after watching their favorite band performance. Interestingly, there is a novel trend around the world right now. Have your ever heard English manias? In China, many students are exerted to be expert in English. Did you know, why? The simple answer is because English offers to get better live, job, and education. English as the world second language helps us to have a wider global conversation in various global issues such as climate change, poverty, hunger, and disease. It is commonly known that the world has a universal language. If math is a language of science, then music is a language of motions. Furthermore, English becomes a language of problem solving and represents hope for better future so, English manias is a good trend as the globe has a common language to solve a common problem.
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Nov 14, 2016   #2
Hi Abul,

Here's my remarks for your TED Summary. I hope this would be helpful :)

- Manias can be expressed bythrough various ways.
- In some cases, football maniacs, for example, ... (try to think again, "some" is equal to "more than one". Your example is only one)

- ..like the Beetle bandBeatles , even ...
- In China, many students are exertedsuggested / forced to be expert in English.
- Did you know why? (comma is unnecessary)
- The simple answer is because English offers to geta better livelife , job, and education.
- English as the World's second language helps us to have...
- ...then music is a language of motionsemotion .
- Furthermore, English becomes a language of problem solving language and it represents hope for better future. (stop, new sentence)soThus , English manias is a goodpositive trend as the... ("good" is "A1" level word. Positive is "B1" which is higher.)
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Nov 14, 2016   #3
Hi Abul, I believe this is my first review for your essay and I would like to WELCOME you to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be helpful as well as useful to your writing projects. We aim to provide you with the most accurate and comprehensive feedback we can come up with and should you need further assistance after the review, go ahead and send us your message and we are here for you. Having said that, please find a few suggestions below;

- ManiasA World Mania can be expressed byin various ways.
- In some cases, football maniacsfans , for example,
- the opponent group .
- It similarly appearsThis is similar when teenagers
- even they evencan cry after watching
- their favorite bands performance.
- right now. Have, have your ever heard of English maniasmania ?
- In China, many students are exertedstrive to be experts in English.
- Did you know, wW hy?
- The simple answer isSimple, it's because

There you have it Abul, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and as you can see, the revision is focused on the construction of the sentences, you see, the way you constructed your sentences and the way the words are positioned is not in the way they should be that will make sure that your ideas and the message of your sentences is sent across to your readers properly. Anyhow, I wish to review your revised essay soon.
alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Nov 14, 2016   #4
Hello, this is my correction for you. thanks

Maniacs can be expressed ...
..., for example, shows their emotion by screaming ...

In China, a lot of students are exerted ...
... English offers to get better live , job, and education.

English become the world second language ...


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