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IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Map - changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001


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Jun 12, 2022   #1

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Map



The diagrams below show changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pictures illustrate how the town Felixstone in the UK changed from 1967 to 2001.

Overall, the seaside town underwent a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which are the disappearance of farmland, the development of amenities catering for recreational activities, and the demolition of the port beside the beach.

In the northwest of the town, the golf course and the shops to the left side of the highway remained, while the shops on the opposite side were demolished to make way for the development of the apartments. The farmland in the northeastern area was transformed into an amenities complex, with a swimming pool, a hotel, and two tennis courts.

The southeast of the map also saw dramatic changes, with the marina and the pier being transformed into a public beach, and the fish market being converted into a beach catering for private use. In the southwestern area, a tree was cut down and some wind turbines were built along the side of the beach. A parking space was constructed next to the hotel in the center of the downtown.



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Jun 12, 2022   #2
Include the number of images used in the original. Even though the years that are indicated would be a indirect reference to the number of images, a direct representation will not hurt since the main focus of the summary is information clarity. There should also be a more different way of addressing the years covered. It sounds too much like a cut and paste right now. Vary the reference point whenever you can. Avoid a direct citation of the original to show sentence structure control and word variation abilities. The same observation applies to the location reference.

The writer shows a severely limited knowledge of punctuation usage. He must strive to vary the grammar range of the presentation through the use of other punctuation macks. The second paragraph in particular is GRA problematic. However, the description provided is still clear and on point throughout. Even with the existing errors, this essay may still recieve a good score.


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