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IELTS TASK 1; The map about Garlsdon City.


ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 12, 2014   #1
The map explains about the town of Garlsdon. Government in there has planned to build a new supermarket. This supermarket has two possible locations.

In generally, Garlsdon has three cities which are Hindon, Bransdon, and Cransdon. Garlsdon has 65.000 populations.
The first possible location in country side or suburb. This area located in 12 km to Hindon with 10.000 populations. A new supermarket will be stands between railways and main roads and industry area too. This located can be allowed by car, bus, and train.

The second possible located is more different with first one. This located will be building in town center with industry and housing near from that area. This area can be allowed by car, train, and bus because there are main roads and railway.

Overall, it can be concluded that the second possible location is more recommended to build a new supermarket. This area will be crowed because people from Bransdon and Gransdon can be easy to access that supermarket.



BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 12, 2014   #2
The map explains about the town of Garlsdon.

I think, better if you write; The map explains the town of Garlsdon.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 12, 2014   #3
Garlsdon has three cities which are Hindon, Bransdon, and Cransdon

I feel this sentence can't be put as the main statement starting your paragraph. You are being asked to focus on the two cities planned as the best place for a new supermarket.

Key trends for Supermarket 2 (S2)
As it can be seen from the map, Supermarket 2 is surrounded by rust belt cities. Also, in the north and south of its map, there are small resident areas. The busy main road from Cransdon to Bransdon and vice versa is linked to the center of town, where Supermarket 2 is sited in.

Key trends for Supermarket 1 (S1)
due to Supermarket 1 located in countryside between the main road and the railway to Hindon, there is a high probability that Supermarket 1 would show a great merit. People from the town centre and the other outskirts could use train and car to this area, while the use of transportation in the area of Supermarket 2 is not allowed.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 13, 2014   #4
You need to improve on your structure and I hope you follow dumi's approach.

Overall, it can be concluded that the second possible location is more recommended to build a new supermarket. This area will be crowed because people from Bransdon and Gransdon can be easy to access that supermarket.

This should come soon after your introduction as the overview. For IELTS Task 2, it is good to have a conclusion because it is on essay writing. However, this task is to assess your report writing skills and therefore a conclusion is not really necessary. Your structure should go as INTRODUCTION, OVERVIEW AND DETAILED PARAGRAPHS


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