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The map potrays the development of a town


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Sep 9, 2022   #1
The map potrays the development of a town from 1990 to 2005.

Overall, from 1990 to 2005 the city centre show impressive developments in businesss sector, accomodation, and transportation.

An airport was built next to a school in the northeast town, while the southeast development saw a new ferry port linked to a new railway from the east to the west town. The goverment demolished the houses and developed the three apartment blocks in the southwest. In the northwest, there were three apartement bulidings at the edge of the lake, replacing a big house. Two houses were developed in the northeast town near the hospital.

When it came to other developments, in terms business sites the supermarket in southwest was extended after demolishing the houses and some trees. Other changes showed the factory in the southeast was costructed after removing houses and green areas around railway station. School and hospital remained stable in a 15-year period.
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Sep 10, 2022   #2
The map potrays the development

a town from 1990 to 2005.

- This is an incorrect summary in the sense that the number of maps indicated are not equivalent to the years indicated. There will be at least 2 maps present in this report. These maps should be separated as reference images in the summary based on the year reference. That will help the paragraph meet the 2 sentence summary qualifier.

I will commend the writer for trying to achieve the proper comparison balance in this report through the use of old and new infrastructure references in each paragraph. Though the grammar is not perfect, it is understandable and achieves the aim of this essay which is to provide a clear before and after urban design development for the city. Good job !


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