IELTS TASK 1 The maps below show a breachfront area in AUsstralia in 1950 and today

The maps illustrate how the beachfront area in Australia changed in 1950 and the present day.

Overall, significant changes have been made in term of the front coast, especially on the eastern side of the beach. ・Firstly, the beachfront has been developed and the number of car park has increased

In 1950, there was only a road branch lead to the car park. A road has been expanded to the beach, as there are now two car parks, which are belonging to the road. The playground has been replaced by the car park the dinning tables and pavillon remains in the same place, which is located in the middle of two car parks. The light house remains in the same place and appears at the end of the road. Two clubs have been constructed opposite each other. The surf club is located on the west side near the 50m pool. And the other club is located near the lighthouse and the 25m pool. There were two pools having the same size, which is 25m but the one on the west side has been changed and is now much larger. A restaurant has been built up near the 50m pool. Finally, the beach is unchanged.

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  The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.
  

Actually, the summary should include the number of images . There should also be a clear word reference to the succeeding action of the report which is a comparative analysis. Please note that bullet points as used above should not be reflected in a task 1 presentation.

While the differences are well reported these should have been done over the course of 2 analytical paragraphs. One for the original layout and a separate one that compares the changes then and now. These are apart of the expected format presentation requirements. Failure to meet this will result in accuracy deductions.

The paragraphs should be divided by map title for clarity. Current reporting on the part of the author is thoroughly confusing as the data fails to clearly indicate the "when" of the information shared.

Personal thinking, this essay should involve some more connectors between sentences to make the ideas more coherently, and the second sentence in the 2nd paragraph should not have that bullet point and the word "firstly" as well.

Try to paraphrase the topic in your essay before writing the overall and you should separate your essay into at least 3 paragraphs.