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Marriage older is more advantageous than marrying at young age!


truongnhunhan 3 / 2  
May 21, 2013   #1
In the modern life, there are some debates between the advantages of marrying at the young age and at the older age. In my opinion, it is better to marry at the older because of some reasons.

First at all, marrying at the older age brings families a good finance status. It is neccessary for a couple to have stable jobs and this can takes a lot of time to achive. Money is the reason why young couples are not happy in the family life because they are too young to have a good finance status; as a result, there are so many conflicts in the family relating to money. Moreover, finance problems can lead to other problems in our life, for example, the children in the family are not in good conditions. At the older age, when people have enough time to work and save their money for the family life in the future, this can solves a lot of problems after marrying.

In conclusion, marrying at the old age brings so many advantages an we can avoid undesirable probems in the family life. . .

Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
May 21, 2013   #2
Hi... I just provided my feed back on the same topic little while ago on another thread :D
First, your essay looks pretty short.... Though they say "sweet and short", I guess it does not work so well with essays ...LOL

In the modern life, there are some debates between the advantages of marrying at the young age and at the older age.

.... Need a stronger sentence.... People have different views about the advantages of marrying at young or older age.

First at all, marrying at the older age brings families a good financefinancial status

First of all, marrying at a older age helps start family with some financial stability.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 22, 2013   #3
First, your essay looks pretty short.... Though they say "sweet and short", I guess it does not work so well with essays ...LOL

Pahan is right. You need to have minimum word count for these tasks and I don't think you meet it.


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