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Both of married and unmarried groups were divided into four age categories to check their happiness


Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Sep 1, 2016   #1
TASK 1 : Happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US

The charts reveal the percentage of happiness rating for married and unmarried people. Both of married and unmarried groups were divided into four age categories. Overall in can be seen that married people was more success to find their happiness than bachelor. However, there were not significant differences of gladness rating between parent with and without children

As seen, compared to the bracket of unmarried group, the figure of married group showed more success to get their pleasure rate. Virtually over 40% of couples group leaded enjoyment rating in 18-64 age categories. Meanwhile, unmarried group stayed at around 20% in the same criteria. For elderly category, however, the percentage of single happiness rating was higher than other categories with similar group at 34% but still lower than married group for all criteria.

The most significant fact to emerge second chart was the similar number of gladness rating for married with and without children in US. The number of each category showed more or less 40% success rate getting their happiness.




RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 1, 2016   #2
The charts reveal the percentage of happiness rating[redundancy] for married and unmarried peopleAmericans[don't forget to mention all the key points of the question] .

Overall init can be seen that married people[need to vary your words/phrases to reduce repetition] was more success to ...

*overall, i find that your introduction is quite well-structured except that you did not mention about the second chart purpose on your first sentence

As seen, compared to the bracket of unmarried group , the figure of married group showed more success ...

The most significant fact to emerge onthe second chart was ...

*despite of some important corrections that you need to concern, i find that you have shown marked progress on your writing. Good job


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