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Which matters more for the personality development?Born characteristics or Experience


Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 7, 2013   #1
Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Some people believe that the characteristics of a person immensely influenced by the birth nature, whereas others argue that it is all about the circumstances and surroundings which shape his or her thoughts and behaviors. I would say one's experience and encompassing conditions make a person to be good or bad.

Undoubtedly, we all can accept that everyone born in this world as a good soul. Nobody can inherit particular character right from the birth for any child. In addition, young champs are grasping the things from what they have observed around them. They try to imitate the same action slowly by themselves. Until there was a source of input, there is no way, a child can learn new things on its own. Moreover, there is a well-known fact that children who are grown among similar age group of babies tend to speak quickly as compare to others who are alone in home. This is due to the observation capability which is usually at much more higher level for children.

Further experience makes everyone what they are today. No matter under which family they are all born. We have many famous personalities in this world like Abraham Lincoln who father was a cobbler and many more successful industrialists who are all came from very poor families. Similarly, there are terrorists, who are highly educated in reputed universities like Bin Laden.

In contrast, I would agree, people who are highly talented in particular field such as sports or music might be influenced by nature of birth. Those people should have acquired some super natural talents by birth which helps them to reach the excellent position in their profession. In spite of consistent practices and training, it is highly difficult to overcome the people blessed with such natural talents. However, such talents also seem to become useless, if there is no chance of identifying their hidden talent due to their surrounding environment.

In conclusion, I would say characteristics of a person cannot be define by birth, rather than influenced by the experience encountered by them right from birth. Hence it is highly essential to take care of our behaviour in front of children for their benefit of their future.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 7, 2013   #2
Some people believe that the characteristics of a person immensely influenced by the birth nature,

The topic itself says that research shows this phenomenon. So, why don't you go by the topic?
Some research suggest that people are born with certain characteristics.
Always maintain a proper alignment with your topic and do not go out of topic. :)
However, it's a very good introduction!
OP Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 7, 2013   #3
Thanks Duminda. Agree with your point. It is always good to support the topic rather than having contradictory opinion.
Try to be in topic in my essay. Thanks again
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 7, 2013   #4
as compare to others who are alone in home.

...as compared to others....

No matter under which family they are all born.

No matter in which family they are born

Abraham Lincoln who father

Abraham Lincoln whose father....

We have many famous personalities in this world like Abraham Lincoln who father was a cobbler and many more successful industrialists who are all came from very poor families.

This sentence is too long.... You should have stopped at cobbler story :)
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 7, 2013   #5
hai Arun...

Concentrate little bit...

It is an opinion essay..
One side you should tell support and write clear reasons..o.k..

So in my opinion the para starting with
In contrast....?
Here you are agreeing the talents are heriditory and important...
In the starting you agreed with environmental impacts more..then telling important talent...
stay on one opinion develop it..
You can read the essay on the same topic

In this page with my name (gene or environment i think) you may get some more points.
Tessy..
OP Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 7, 2013   #6
Dear Duminda and Tessy,
Thank you for your comments and time you spent to gothrough my essay.
Your comments keep boosting me a lot to correct my mistakes.
I am feeling confident that I could make some good progress in my writing before appearing for exam.
Thank you again.
Please keep sending me your comments.

Arun


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