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In 1962, Meadowside Village and Fonton were just two separated, quiet and small places.


tyindriani36 1 / -  
Sep 6, 2016   #1
The map shows the development of Meadowside Village and Fonton over three different time periods (1962,1985 and present)
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The maps illustrate the changes that have occurred in Meadowside Village and Fonton over three different periods, beginning in 1962, jump to 1985, and ending in 2016. There have been significant developments from time to time. The most noticeable change that can be seen is dilation in both areas, which now is becoming a crowd town.

In 1962, Meadowside Village and Fonton were just two separated quiet and small places. Then, for over 20 years, residential landscape was built in Meadowside Village. Housing estate can be seen in the west side of the village, and in addition to this, a superstore was invented. The Village also start becoming a holiday destination since leisure complex was built. These developments led to a new road construction, which connect Fonton and Meadowside.

Following this, major changes have been happening during 1985 to 2016. Both regions are no longer separated by an empty land. It is altered with business park and hotel that were established in the heart of the area. The town can be reached by train which runs from Fonton.




Ilmi_03 47 / 69 11  
Sep 6, 2016   #2
Note:
- Don't add your personal opinion, particularly in this part The Village also start becoming a holiday destination since leisure complex was built
. There is not any reference about it.

- I am confused about the difference between residential area and housing estate.
Avoid to make a rambling sentence. Write simply and clearly.

That's all for you.
ondemande20 5 / 6 2  
Sep 6, 2016   #3
hii, i will give some suggest for you, just ignore if you think your text is better..

The maps illustrate the changes that have occurred in Meadowside Village ...
The map displays the information about development programs in Meadowside village and Fonton which have begin in 1962,1985 and present.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 6, 2016   #4
Hi Tri, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope you find this website to be helpful to your articles as well as valuable to your revision. We aim to bring you a well written essay with just the right and accurate feedback that you can incorporate to your essay. Having said that, I went through your analysis and I must say, for your first analysis, it is written fairly well, however, a few more enhancements can add confidence and accuracy to the analysis, so please find a few suggestions below;

- There have been a significant
- developments from time to time.
- The most noticeable change that can bewas
- seen isin the dilation in both areas,
- which is now is becoming a crowd town.

- were just two separated in quiet and small places.
- was inventedestablished .
- The Village also start becomingto become a holiday

- hotels that were established

There you have it Tri, I believe the above suggestions are helpful to your revision and for future writing reference, mind the minor details of your sentences such as your linking verbs as this will also affect the overall impact of the essay or the analysis in this case.


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