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A meal is not only the original resource for daily energy and health but also the spirit feast


Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 14, 2009   #1
this my toefl topic! thx!
Q: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

With the acceleration of technical improvement, it is undeniable that food has become easier to prepare. Nevertheless, there exists a controversial issue whether the advanced-technical food has really improved the way people live? As far as I am concerned, the disadvantages far overweigh the advantages. Here followed the reasons.

One of the primary objectives for easier accessible food existed is to safe people's time. For that reason, food is probably made in a hurry so that nobody can ensure they get the indispensable nutrition we need for every day. From a sustainable perspective, it is not acceptable. Let me take the microwave cookers as an example, which play an important role in people's daily lives. With the help of microwave, food can be prepared to eat within 3-5 minutes, which is obviously quite convenient, but how can it guarantee the nutrition taking our health into consideration? Do you really think they can play a magic show for us, providing the tasty and rich healthy food? To be honest, microwave cooker is merely the heating machine, its only function is just to heat anything put into it.

Besides, to have meals done quickly, cooks prefer to keep a mount of stock in kitchen, so the additives are necessary, which is harmful to humans' body. According to a research called "public attitudes towards food", 64% of individuals concerned their health due to the way they eat, 15% of the rest said they felt better when they cook themselves. This report has drawn the public attention to the self-made food.

To a higher lever, as public prefer the fast-prepared food such as KFC, burger king, the cook skill will be easily lost in the wind, which means, to a certain extent, the national cook culture is losing away gradually. That kind of junk food will replace the individual's mind, they will not be awareness of the enjoyment of the meal. To them, food is a just a kind of things making them full.

So sum up, meals are not only the original resource for daily energy and health but also the spirit feast, we should take our bodies into account while persuading the convenience.

EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Sep 14, 2009   #2
Your logic in the first paragraph is a bit odd. It is true that using a microwave does not usually add to the nutritional content of the food. However, neither does using an oven or stove-top. The method of cooking can make some foods slightly healthier or worse for us. Microwaved bacon, for instance, is much healthier than fried bacon, whereas vegetables cooked on the stove are a bit healthier than those that have been microwaved. However, in most cases,

microwave cooker is merely the heating machine, its only function is just to heat anything put into it.

So, it adds to convenience without affecting the nutritional content, and this you say is a bad thing?

Your logic in the second paragraph likewise needs strengthening. I believe you mean to criticize the additives found in many canned and frozen foods. That would be a great point to make. However, why you should object to cooks using stock, which is very useful as a base for gravies, sauces, and soups, is beyond me.

And the third paragraph, same sort of problem. No denying that fast food is bad for you, but to say that people don't enjoy such foods is just foolish. Fast food is popular precisely because it tastes so good. Something to do with humans having evolved to be innately addicted to fat and sugar, as I recall.
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 14, 2009   #3
EF_Sean

thank you for your suggestion.

exactlly, I was also feel weird when writing this essay, but when I first glanced at this topic, the negative sides hit me so I wrote the negative side,but then I realized that it is so difficult to support my ideas without thinking the benefits from the easier access to food!

haha~

Anyway, very appreciate your help again!
jiaxing 2 / 7  
Sep 15, 2009   #4
Jin
So sum up, meals are not only the original resource for daily energy and health but also the spirit feast, we should take our bodies into account while persuading the convenience.

Ad conjunction after the comma.
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 15, 2009   #5
jiaxing

thanks~

but what do you mean by saying "Ad conjunction after the comma."?

you means add "and" before "we should take our bodies into account while persuading the convenience." ?
jiaxing 2 / 7  
Sep 15, 2009   #6
Sorry, spelling mistake.
That's what I mean.
I'm preparing for the TOEFL test as well:)
Are you applying for a college?
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 16, 2009   #7
jiaxing
yes.

sort of~
thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 17, 2009   #8
your essay is not very good. the topic request:-is that easier to prepare food.
- this change has improved the life. the first part you answer that is to prepare.
however, the next part you dont answer that this change is good or not for the life, how this change affect on the life
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 18, 2009   #9
thinhtvdhtm

thanks, i have modified it ,so ,can you give me some more suggestion?

really thanks~

With the acceleration of technical improvement, it is undeniable that food has become easier to prepare. Nevertheless, there exists a controversial issue whether the advanced-technical food has really improved the way people live? As far as I am concerned, the disadvantages far overweigh the advantages. The following are why I think this way.

One of the primary objectives for advanced-technological food existed is to safe people's time. For that reason, food is probably made in a hurry so that nobody can ensure they get the indispensable nutrition we need for every day. From a sustainable perspective, it is not acceptable. Let me take the microwave as an example, which plays an important role in people's daily lives. With the help of microwave, food can be prepared to eat within 3-5 minutes, which is obviously quite convenient, but how can it guarantee the nutrition when taking our health into consideration? Do you really think they can provide the tasty and rich healthy food? To be honest, microwave cooker is merely the heating machine, its only function is just to heat anything put into it.

Besides, to have meals done quickly, people prefer to stock a lot of canned and frozen food, so the additives are necessary, which is harmful to humans' body. According to a research called "public attitudes towards food", 64% of individuals concerned their health due to the way they eat, 15% of the rest said they felt better when they cook themselves. This report has drawn the public attention to the self-made food.

To a higher lever, as public prefer the fast-prepared food such as KFC, burger king, the cooking skill will gradually disappear, which means, to a certain extent, the national cook culture is losing away gradually. That kind of junk food will replace the individual's mind, they will not be aware of the enjoyment of cooking. To them, food is a just a kind of things making them full.

To sum up, meals are not only the original resource for daily energy and health but also the spiritual feast, we should take our bodies into account while persuading the convenience.
thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 18, 2009   #10
i think that if you think this change makes our lives better: reasons: can save time for doing other things, or food is more delicious,more kinds of food created, and so on.

if you think that this change brings disadvantages: reason: some kinds of food not very good for health because they contain too high fat, sugar...,
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 19, 2009   #11
thinhtvdhtm
thank you
thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 19, 2009   #12
never mind, good luck for you.i am preparing for ielts, do you know some bebsites useful for writing, especially for writing task 1. if u know, please give me. thanks in advance
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 19, 2009   #13
thinhtvdhtm

i think there must exist some model you can use in BBS,you can find some there

break your leg ~
thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 20, 2009   #14
thank for your help. i will try it


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