The genuie meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply be defined as the accomplishments that a person as acheieved in life or the opposite of failure to be precise.This makes it a misbelieve that being successful solely depend on earning a lot of money.
Firstly,lets take a look at the very wealthy hollywood stars and musicians,they make so much money but are always invovle in one sandal or the other...
The genuine meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply be defined as the accomplishments that a person has achieved in life, or the opposite of failure to be precise.This
makes it a misbelievecontradicts the belief that being successful solely dependdepends solely on earning a lot of money.
ly , lets take a look at the very wealthy hH ollywood stars and musicians.T hey make so much money, but are always invovleinvolved in one sandalscandal or the otheranother, like drug addiction, suicide, assault, and so on. WillWould they be considered a good example of successful personspeople ? Definitely not[ though making large amount of money is the password] (I don't quite understand the necessity of this phrase or what you're getting at) .[ Many make less money but they achieve their set goals and that is considered success.] (This seems like a sentence that belongs in your next paragraph)
ly , success can not be defined in relation to money.It deals more with the ability to live a life that is worth living and makes you to be happy. For example, my parents always consider themselves as being successful al[ though they are mediocre(perhaps "middle-classed" is the word you're looking to use?) . but theWhat little they earned was made so useful. The whole children were sent to school from this little payused to send all four of their children to school.T hey are proud to have a doctor son and a civi l engineer, while the other two are still in the university studying nursing and accountancy. Thinking about us gives them great joy and they always say it that they are the most successful people in the world.
In conclusion, true success has a lot more with happiness than with money and not only individuals that earn a lot are successful.
On the whole, I like your essay, it was very solid and the points you brought up were simple yet effective in making your point. Minor suggestion that maybe you take the last sentence of your second paragraph and make it the topic sentence of your third because it seems more befitting than what you originally have there. Also, you might want to make your thesis clearer and expand your conclusion which seems a little short.
You have good points in your essay, and I like your point of view on the subject. Just watch the way you say some things because it can sound confusing to the reader.
Rhodeza and Emily , thanks for reading through my essay.I could see that i made many spelling mistakes and will try to improve on that.Clarity will also be my watch word.
Somebody should please review this for me again.
To define success can be complex but individuals give meanings that suit their personal achievements to it. Being successful can simply be defined as the accomplishment a person has achieved in his/her life time or the opposite of failure to be precise. Individuals at each point in life have a set goal; when these goals are acheived ,they consider themselves has being successful. This makes me to disagree with the above statement thereby contradicting the belief that earning a lot of money is the only way to be considered as successful.
First,success cannot be defined in relation to money but more to happiness. A good example are lecturers who devote so much time to make their notes,give assisgnments,mark tests and examinations,and give revision classes. All these cannot be compare to the money they earn. They do a lot and earn little but the effectiveness of their teaching in their students grade at the end of each semester make them feel that their goals of improving someone's life was achieved and that can be considered a success. Being happy with the result of their work overshadows earning more from the same work.
Furthermore,success is often confused with earning huge amount of money. Lets take a look at the Hollywood actors and actresses.They earn a lot and are well know but are often involve in sandals, assault and drug addiction; making them send so much on rehabilitation and sending time in prison. Will this be considered being successful? Definitely no.
In conclusion,true success has a lot more to do with happiness than making a lot of money. So people should not get carried away in money hunting but in doing things that will make them to fulfilled in life.
...give meanings that suit their personal achievements.
to it This is very good, but you do not need these 2 words at the end.
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This causes me to disagree with the above statement thereby contradicting the belief that earning a lot of money is the only way to be considered as successful.
It is strange... if you use the word cause you need the word to, but if you use the word makes you do not need the word to. English is a funny language.
Furthermore,success is often confused with earning huge amount of money. ---very good point!
They earn a lot and are well know but are often involve in sandals, assault and drug addiction; making them send so much on rehabilitation and sending time in prison. ---Ha ha, you wrote sandals, which means a kind of shoe you wear to the beach. The correct word is scandals.
That is a funny error! :-)