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IELTS - Media Attention to Report Celebrities' Life Instead of The Ordinaries


replikatika 4 / 5 1  
Feb 5, 2015   #1
The media pay too much attention to lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Human's lifestyle is most influenced by media. For that reason, some of communities suggest the media should inform more common people's stories than those of famous people such as actors, singers or footballers which lately become media's focus. While I firmly believe that celebrities' stories can positively influence society in obtaining their successful lives, I personally argue that by exposing more ordinary people's stories, the media are able to encourage society to have a low-profile character and facilitate them to improve their social awareness.

I would argue that the stories of common people exposed by the media lead society to be low-profile as a person does a multi-modal learning while they are watching and reading information from the media. A related study shows that such a kind of learning process can lead the learners remembering ninety percent of the whole information. It is because this process activates all learning modalities such as visual, auditory, and kinaesthetic learning and provides a real context at once. As result, this low-profile value which is contained can fully be delivered and absorbed by the audience.

In addition, the reports of common people's life are closely related to a high social awareness of community since it exposures people by the daily life of the ordinaries that develop genuine empathy. It was proved in South Africa which set a television drama series for social change, titled Soul City. Consequently, the society became more aware of social and health issues and were prompted to help each other. It is proved that media's focus on common people stories tends to generate a worldwide benefit.

Conversely, those of the celebrities will influence people to acquire their success harder. The more the people are exposed by the achievement stories, the bigger they have internal motivation. Therefore, the society are one step closer to their successful lives. There is no doubt that such media reports have a remarkable advantage.

The aforementioned evidence shows that reporting stories about the famous can lead people to their success, while the community will benefit greatly if they are exposed more by those of the common people. However, I strongly believe both kinds of information can be reported in a balance proportion in media. Where possible, media should not put too many scenarios in the stories so as to emphasize their real sense.

tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Feb 5, 2015   #2
Hello replikatika,

The media pay too much attention to lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Human's lifestyle is most influenced by media. For that reason, some of communities suggest the media should inform more common people's stories than those of famous people such as actors, singers or footballers which lately become media's focus. While I firmly believe that celebrities' stories can be positively influence society in obtaining their successful lives, I personally argue that by exposing more ordinary people's stories, the media are able to encourage society to have a low-profile character and facilitate them to improve their social awareness.

The form of media is the immense source of information. While the media shots straight the famous people to the top rating, paying attention to ordinary people's story is to go hand in hand with. Therefore, I strongly believe that the balance combination of both figures which is provided in the form of mass media is to be concerned as the supplementary information has to be encouraged so as to arouse readers' interest.

I would argue that the stories of common people exposed by the media lead society to be low-profile as a person does a multi-modal learning while they are watching and reading information from the media. A related study shows that such a kind of learning process can lead the learners remembering ninety percent of the whole information. It is because this process activates all learning modalities such as visual, auditory, and kinaesthetic learning and provides a real context at once. As result, this low-profile value which is contained can fully be delivered and absorbed by the audience.

Although there is no strict regulation in which writers have to place their personal opinion, I suggest to place it in the thesis statement or in conclusion. However, in this case, your prompt is not asking you about your personal opinion so state your opinion in thesis statement. Overall, your writing is quite great.


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