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Media does not only reflect culture and social life


ankurhimanshu 1 / 2  
Jan 15, 2013   #1
The media of the nation does not only reflect the cultural and social life of its residents but also helps in developing a positive mindset. The human mind finds entertainment in the television content, such as violence and profanity that is unnatural to itself because these appear as unexplored areas as the person has always been taught to follow peace and harmony by his parents and by the society he lives in. So, by living in the imaginary world through television a person can fulfill his hidden desires. But too much indulgence in such activities causes the mid to degrade to such a level the person might actually commit those activities in real life and the minds that get affected the most are those of children. In India, the unawareness of films rating is found not only with illiterate but also with the literate population. Due to this the people with sensitive minds and heart, especially children are exposed to contents that affect them. It is a common sight in the country that parents are found watching mature contents along with their children. Even if the parents are responsible, it is difficult; nowadays to keep aloof children from television, especially when both parents are working and children are left alone at home. Even if the children are stopped from watching the mature contents on television, freedom to the broadcasters will lead to telecast of contents that would be unsuitable for people of all ages because it is difficult for a person to judge for himself. Hence, it becomes a prime responsibility of the government to understand the mindset of the people of the nation or community and decide what kind of shows might prevent a mind from degradation.
karmalove 4 / 7  
Jan 15, 2013   #2
This is a pretty solid essay you have here! The only concern that I see is how much you contradict yourself..it's not bad or anything, but you keep going "BUT this...BUT that"..

Overall, I enjoyed reading it!
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jan 16, 2013   #3
The media of the nation does not only reflect the cultural and social life of its residents but also helps in developing a positive mindset.
It would sound better like this: The nation's media reflects culture, social life, and it also helps to develop a positive mindset.

Good advice by Jennyflower81. You can also use the term "National media" that refers to nation's media.

The human mind finds entertainment in the television content, such as violence and profanity that is unnatural to itself because these appear as unexplored areas as the person has always been taught to follow peace and harmony by his parents and by the society he lives in.

.... avoid writing too long sentences. They tend to confuse the reader.

I guess this essay is for IELTS or TOEFL tasks. If it is the case, you need to present your essay in at least four paras that include the introduction, two body paras and a conclusion.
OP ankurhimanshu 1 / 2  
Jan 17, 2013   #4
Focus on your first sentence, which will be you thesis statement. You need to be sure that your thesis introduces what you intend to explain in your paper.

The sentence has been written in this way because I want to lay stress on the effects of media on an individual mindset along.
OP ankurhimanshu 1 / 2  
Jan 17, 2013   #5
Thanks to everyone for time and advice...


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