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IELTS task 1: median costs of houses and units in four cities in Australia over a 16 year


andial 21 / 48 3  
Mar 16, 2014   #1
Hi Folks... I am preparing for the IELTS test. Please kindly need your input and comments on these matters (Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resources and Grammar)

thank you in advance

Cheers,
andial

Question:
The graphs present information on the median costs of houses and units in four cities in Australia over a 16 year period
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Answer:

Given are the line graphs presenting on median costs of houses and condominium in the four major towns A, B, C and D in Australia over a 16 year period.

It is noticeable that even though town A experienced a valuable fluctuation, it still constantly came up with the highest rate in term of median costs both houses and condominium from 1980 to 1996 excluding the period between Jun 1984 and 1987. On the other hand, while town C and D seems like not having special trends, town B which was at the second position in case of median house prices experienced a slight fluctuation on condominium.

A more detailed look at the graph shows town A, in case of houses prices, rose suddenly to approximately $ 80 thousand in Jun-82 then peaked at $ 210 on Jun-87 before reaching $ 240 at the end of the period. While the second position, city B increase was conformable to the trend of city A, city C overtook city D position at $ 100 on Jun-90.

Interestingly, in term of condominium prices, while town A had same trend with town A in the previous case which was at $ 200 on Jun-96, the three other cities preceded one another.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 16, 2014   #2
Ok , where is the line graph? You should have upload the graph for us to have a look before providing you with our feedbacks. That is the only way you can earn more meaningful feedbacks. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature in the message block for uploading your graph :)

I suggest you to include an overview in between the introduction and the detailed para :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 17, 2014   #3
Overall, I think you write very well and really need not to worry about this task. However, you need an overview to polish your IELTS visual writing.

I suggest you to include an overview in between the introduction and the detailed para :)

I am with Dumi.
The Overview is an outline of the main and most obvious trends and it doesn't go into details.


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