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Median hours spent on housework, childcare or gardening per week by married women and men


DanielDang 1 / 2  
Sep 11, 2022   #1

The average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories



The bar graph compares married women and married men in terms of the median hours spent on housework, childcare or gardening per week in 3 sectors.

In general, the amount of time that women spend doing unpaid work is considerably more than men. It is noticeable that the wives need to do more work when they have more children, while there is a reverse trend in the husband's cases.

It can be seen from the graph that women without children spend 30 hours working on weekly housework or gardening. By contrast, families with 1-2 children consumed more wife's hours per week, at approximately 51 hours, 21 hours higher than who have no children. The figure for those who have three or more kids even higher, at 60 hours.

On the other hand, unpaid work doesn't cost much time of married men with nearly same amount of hours for categories of no children and 1-2 children, at around 19 hours. Furthermore, the amount of work done by husbands slightly fells by 2 hours when they have more than 3 kids.



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Sep 11, 2022   #2
in 3 sectors.

The 3 sectors should have been listed as the 2nd sentence requirement of this paragraph. A basic paragraph is composed of at least 2 sentences covering 40 words mimumin. An academic paragraph is composed of at least 3 sentences, with a maximum of 5 sentences per paragraph. The choice as to the paragraph sentence number depends upon the exam taker. Aim for at least 2 sentences next time to complete the summary overview. The more sentences you list, the better for the summarized information. Just make sure it is relevant to the shortened information presentation.

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husband's

If one is referring to husbands, then the women should be referred to as the married women, wives, or mothers. Whichever descriptive word best suits the information presentation. Improve the word usage in reference to alternative references.

It can be seen

Do not refer to something seen in the graph because it appears that the writer is asking the reader to look at the graph. This is something that cannot be done since the idea is to use creative descriptions, without exaggerations to create the analytical report.

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