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Memorial Day Essay - significant history


saichicka39 3 / 6  
Apr 22, 2013   #1
Memorial Day Essay: "What is Memorial Day, and what does it mean to you?" Word Count Limit: 500-525

Memorial Day Essay: "What is Memorial Day, and what does it mean to you?" Word Count Limit: 500-525

It would be appreciated if you could find any mechanical errors, or give me some other ideas, feedback and that kind of stuff that I could include in the essay. Well here it is:

Memorial Day has a significant history which makes it such a poignant and touch holiday that it is today. Memorial Day was originally proclaimed as Decoration Day on May 5, 1868, by General John Logan, a Union general of the Civil War. Decoration Day was first observed on May 30, 1868 at the Arlington National Cemetery. On that day, flowers were laid on the graves of those who had died during the U.S. Civil War, both Union and Confederate soldiers. Despite the initial observation five years before, Decoration Day was first recognized by the state of New York in 1873. By 1890, it was recognized by most of the northern states as a national holiday. However, the southern states had failed to acknowledge May 30th as Decoration Day. Instead, each state of the south has their own "Decoration Day" type of holiday, by calling it different names, celebrated on different days. During the reconstruction of World War I, Decoration Day was expanded to honor all U.S. military soldiers who died from any actions the United States has taken its part in. It wasn't until then the southern states had finally begun to observe Decoration Day. Nevertheless, the southern states had continued to celebrate their other form of "Decoration Day."
trilam153 9 / 21 3  
Apr 25, 2013   #2
I'd like it if you mix your feeling, and its meaning to you together. Less fact, more feelings for it's the main point of the essay
andrea94 3 / 9 1  
Apr 25, 2013   #3
Memorial Day Essay: "What is Memorial Day, and what does it mean to you?" Word Count Limit: 500-525

It would be appreciated if you could find any mechanical errors, or give me some other ideas, feedback and that kind of stuff that I could include in the essay. Well here it is:

Memorial Day has a significant history which makes it such a poignant and touch holiday that it is today. Memorial Day was originally proclaimed as Decoration Day on May 5th , 1868, by General John Logan, a Union general of the Civil War. Decoration Day was first observed on May 30th , 1868 at the Arlington National Cemetery. On that day, flowers were laid on the graves of those who had died during the U.S. Civil War, both Union and Confederate soldiers. Despite the initial observation five years before (do you mean that the state of NY has started to observe it 5 years before it was recognized? , Decoration Day was first recognized by the state of New York in 1873. By 1890, it was recognized by most of the northern states as a national holiday. However, the southern states had failed to acknowledge May 30th as Decoration Day. InsteadHowever , each state of the south has theirits own "Decoration Day" type of holiday, by calling itcalled in different names, celebrated on different days. During the reconstruction of World War I, Decoration Day was expanded to honor all U.S. military soldiers who died from any actions the United States hashad taken its part in. It wasn't until then the southern states had finally begun to observe Decoration Day. Nevertheless, the southern states had continued to celebrate their other forms of "Decoration Day."
In the May of 1966, President Lyndon Johnson officially declared Waterloo, New York to be the birthplace of Decoration Day. However, there are many places that still claim to be the birthplace of Decoration Day. In 1967, President Johnson officially changed the name of "Decoration Day" to "Memorial Day." A year after 1967, the Uniform Monday Holiday Bill was passed by the U.S. Congress and signed by President Johnson making Memorial Day the last Monday in May. This resulted in a three-day weekend for federal employees. The consequence forof this act was that Memorial Day weekend has been increasingly become a time to play and having (why don't you write "have"?) picnics, instead of remembering the ones who put their life in front of ours.
While some people on Memorial Day may host a Bar-B-Que, picnic, or party to have fun, I see Memorial Day at a whole new angle of the spectrum. As a legal immigrant from India, I do not know any other way to thank the late ones who protect (us? me? you should write whom they protect) every day. From the perspective of seeing America as a foreign country, it is inspiring that American soldiers gave their life up, so I could be safe in the U.S. Even though I do not personally know anyone who passed in military service, it is heartbreaking to listen to all the stories of lost, loved ones. I have learned to appreciate these heroes because if it weren't for them I wouldn't have done all the wonderful things i did in my life. The fallen served as a symbol of bravery for America and prove the legacy of courage for Americans. The lost ones have done something that other people wouldn't have done, making them the very first to respect, who make every day possible for us in America. So on Memorial Day, join me to remember the ones who had always been there to protect us, when we couldn't protect ourselves.

Word Count: 525

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