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A mentor as a shortcut to success?


masa cerah 1 / -  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Summary TED : why I read a book every day

Everyone wants to have a happy life and perfect, but everyone can not get it. We may have heard that a lot of mentors to be one of the keys to achieving the life we want. They say, supposing mentor is a shortcut to success. On one occasion in TEDxUBIWiltz, Tai Lopez is a certified financial planner and a mentor to share his views on the book. In retrospect, the relationship between them so far and almost impossible to be associated. But, there are a few things that unites the two. And this relationship that makes the reason to always read a book every day. There are many right mentor, who can help us realize the dream. But unfortunately, most of them no longer live in this era. Call it Einstein, Stave Jobs, Aristotle, Plato, and many other great mentor. Therefore, we can only learn from experiences, thoughts, and also the point of the life of the book. Both books they write, or also biography. That is, we must have a lot of mentors and learn from them. And build a relationship with books be our mentor, see them as a friend.
eve01 24 / 40 5  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Hi masacerah
here is my notes for you

" Everyone wants to have a happy life and ..."You should put (") on this sentence because you took from tai Lopez.

They saysaid , supposing mentor is ...

On one occasion in TEDxUBIWiltz , Tai Lopez is a certified ...that's better if you share his name in the first paragraph than u put in middle or in body story, bad organize.

In retrospect, the relationship between them so far ...this sentence jumps

This your next sentences also, this made readers difficult to understand what you want to share,

Call itThey are Einstein, (...), and many other great mentorS .
Both books they writewrote , or also biography. That is, we must have a lot of mentors andThe point is we could learn from them.

Not only jump of your sentence but you are also missing of your contents here.


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