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"I AM NOT A MERE TEACHER" - creative essay


dchege711 2 / 6 1  
Jul 17, 2014   #1
It is only 5 am yet I can sleep no more. Unfortunate, you may think. But I love this! Nothing gets my heart racing than the thrill of a new day. I hurriedly gobble my abbreviated breakfast. "Better days ahead," I reassure myself. My legs chauffeur me to my heaven on earth. By the way, my area politician should be ashamed of lying to me that he would tarmac this road if we voted him in. The fellow instead built himself a mansion and employed two unnaturally muscular guards to keep off 'unwanted visitors.' Finally, "good morning students?" They respond cheerfully. I continue, "today we shall learn how to..."

I chuckle when anybody dismisses me as a mere teacher. I am a dispenser of hopes, dreams, ambition and all the good things that we have in our society, of course, apart from the politician! Almost everybody gives up on the chap who could only manage a 120 out of the imaginary 500 in the grade 8 exam. But I don't. I received her in grade 9 and tell her she is many things but daft. If she crams not lyrics than perfect squares, I promptly give a CAT to refocus her mind. I can't forget to warn her that the fellow complimenting her hair is a hungry wolf. Thou shall fall in live with thy syllabus, period. At times she comes crying and then I let go off my math textbook and offer a shoulder- a metaphorical one, I must add!

With such a noble job, it beats logic that I am still hovering precariously a few inches above minimum wage. On the other hand, I do get paid. Producing an engineer, or better still, a teacher would certainly massage my heart. Inevitably, mossy of my students don't make it to campus. I am glad when I see Kerubo in a grocery store and not in a skimpy see-through dress. Kamau is a bus driver. That is one less village idler. Suleiman works as an accountant. I also heard that Nzioka supplies milk to four primary schools. At first glance, these achievements seem more inflated than the tender prices on TV. But these students (and their teachers) have worked hard considering the odds.

Let none call me a mere teacher. Where the society sees hopeless individuals, I see candles in need of a flame.
cantaloupecats /  
Jul 20, 2014   #2
This essay is very bold, and not necessarily in a bad way. However, you seem to have the habit of going off on tangents. That is to say, you include somewhat unnecessary things in your essay. For example, the politician has absolutely no place in your essay. This is not the place to rant about others.

I am a dispenser of hopes, dreams, ambition and all the good things that we have in our society, of course, apart from the politician!

I think this verges on being a bit boastful and braggart-y. It is definitely not how you want to present yourself. "I am a dispenser of...all the good things we have in our society..." doesn't acknowledge all the other hard-working individuals who help make the society good. Not everyone is like the politician, and if you don't convey that in the essay, it may turn readers off.

I like how you use examples, such as the student from grade 9. That is a personal connection that you want to make with the reader, and it certainly gives you sympathy and admiration points. I must say that I'm not too sure what you mean by "CAT", as I assume it's not a real kitten. Perhaps it's a test? Maybe in your area this term is well known, though, so I won't ask you to define it in the essay.

My absolute favourite part of the essay is the last two lines. It's powerful. Insanely powerful.
OP dchege711 2 / 6 1  
Jul 23, 2014   #3
thanks for correcting me on the digressions. n a cat means continuous assessment test... it's quite common in my country


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