1958: when Michael was born in lower middle class family with a curse of being black. The family was musical indeed since mother, father, sisters and brothers were had a musical career. Mickey had four bros, when he was mere three years old he was compelled by the father(Joseph) to join the Jackson five . Mickey was five when he got to be the lead singer.
His first album "off the wall" was a success , but he wished more because only he knew what he had inside , so he tried hard to make his next album "thriller" every song was a killer .it took him to the peak of music and sealed his position as a music pop icon . Thriller is the biggest selling album of all time . In the thriller era he introduced his famous moon walk , and a silver glove on right hand . Which became extremely famous .
Next album was "bad" this was a great hit ,in which mike had more artistic freedom then his previous two albums . During this time he was extremely criticized due to his paling skin color and his childish attitude , media also played a very negative role in this regard. Mike
Was very upset with this response he told a reporter " why don't you print that Michael is an alien, he eat living chickens " . In this period he made a movie like no other "moonwalker" it was distributed in portions and every portion had a different story . Michael moved to never land a dream world for any child. He was greatly concerned with global affairs he gave 300 million dollars during his career for charity and was known as humanitarian.
His other albums were dangerous, history , blood on the dance floor and invincible .In 1997 Michael made a ground breaking movie 'ghost'. Gradually he became victimized by racial lobbies, media was also unfair in this regard, as it always blamed him for things he had even never anticipated . Michael Jackson made many popular world tours that include bad, dangerous, history and jam .
Mike was accused two times for child molestation. Although it was later proven wrong but it actually changed public opinion for him and they started hating him. Michael was also criticized for his changing appearance .he was also disturbed due to his health and financial problems , for which he had no solution indeed , and due to the same financial problem he was forced to do a last tour in London called 'this is it' .
Mike was now 50 and didn't had spirit like youth but he had to dance so during the rehearsal for upcoming shows, he got a heart arrest and died at 25th June 2009 . He married twice and had tree children . Tributes came from all over the world and every one cherished his music . He will be alive for ever in fans heart. Rest in peace.
it seem to be ok, but perhaps you could start with a more catching line or a quotation that might express your own opinion about MJ life and art.
the whole essay is like it was taken from the wiki.. however if the main aim is just to tell facts about MJ, so it seems to be ok then..
yup it might seem to be a wiki . material but its really authentic . i could write it in a way you expressed , but what i wanted was to give some kind of homage to mj....this is it....
1958: when Michael was born in lower middle class family with a curse of being black. ---- if you call it a curse, you should say it is a curse because of racism during the time he grew up. If you just say it is a curse, you seem like YOU are prejudiced.
The family was musical indeed, since mother, father, sisters, and brothers all had a musical career.
Your first paragraph does not introduce the essay as it is supposed to. All it does is list several facts about him. You should introduce the MAIN IDEA of the essay in this first paragraph. For example, the essay is not about him being African American, so it is not good to mention the "curse of being black." You have to think of what the main idea for the whole essay is and write a sentence about that idea at the end o the first paragraph.
Capitalize the words in titles: "Off the Wall"
Every essay sould have one main idea and a few smaller ideas. Each paragraph should be about a smaller idea that is related to the main idea. Start each paragraph with a TOPIC SENTENCE that tells the main idea for the paragraph.
Michael moved to Neverland, a dream world for any child. He was greatly concerned with global affairs; he gave 300 million dollars during his career for charity and was known as humanitarian.----- these 2 sentences are not related to each other, so they should not be in the same paragraph.
One paragraph = one idea.
One essay = one big idea with a few paragraphs to explain it.
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