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'Mind Trap' - when someone's mental strength has been washed away by negative thoughts


Fitri12 28 / 53 6  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
TED Summary: The Secret of Becoming Mentally Strong by Amy Morin

According to Amy Morin, a practiced therapist, there is a term called 'Mind Trap', that is when someone's mental strength has been washed away by negative thoughts. She states that there are three Distractive Believes caused people less-effective. The first one is unhealthy believe about ourselves. It is when people are likely to magnify their misfortunes by complaining over and over about their terrible conditions. Secondly called unhealthy believe about others. Most of people assume that others might be able to control and validate their decision in life. They start comparing their achievements or envying others over their possessions. The last one is unhealthy believe about the world as people claim the world owes them for every misery they have suffered from.

In correlated to the Distractive Believes, Amy suggests Brain Training as the appropriate problem solving. She highlights the wish for the world to be fair is impossible since it does not work that way. When facing such a hard time, go through and conquer it!

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erwiin1 9 / 17  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi, Fitri12

Your essay is very good. I would give you suggestions:

1. According to Amy Morin, a practiced therapist. (The word practiced doesn't seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one)
2. The first one is unhealthy (unhealthy to ) believe about ourselves.
3. The last one is unhealthy (unhealthy to ) believe about the world as people claim ...

Thank you


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