Minimum age limit for driving - Discussion

Most countries allow 18-year-old to drive a car. Some people say this is a good age to start driving. Other people say that the minimum age to drive a car should be at least 25 years

Driving skills and safety versus age of a driver

Some people believe that the minimum age of driving vehicle is 18 while others consider that 25 is a better age for driving since people are more mature. I believe that the age is not a determining factor as far as the experience is. This essay will analyse both sides of the argument.

On the one hand, several people believe that the rates of accidents are increasing due to the negligence of immature young drivers and also they believe that the person is matured enough at the age of 25. Also teens do not have the ability to handle worst situation that happens on the road as they are immature. Moreover, as the impact of movies and television stunts, some of the youngsters modify their cars, engines and race them just for attention of others. Since the maturity has not grown among the teenagers, 25 is the age where a person should be allowed to sit behind the wheel.

On the other hand, many people strongly believe that most of the accidents caused by the young drivers are because of lack of experience regardless the age. People of any age group without adequate experience can cause such accidents. Instead of increasing the driving age limit, the government have to identify the root cause of the accidents and appropriate preventive measures should be taken accordingly. For Instance, every road should be given a moderate speed limit and the drivers should be penalised on spot if they exceed the limited speed. The government should make more awareness about the reckless and drunk driving among the public and it definitely reduce the accidents to a great extent.

In conclusion, the driving age should not be raised to 25 and the people over 18 should be allowed to drive as long as they are experienced enough.

Ahamed, kindly post the complete prompt instructions so that I can verify if the method of your opinion presentation is accurate for the essay. I would like to judge your essay accurately based upon the final line of the prompt that relates to how the prompt should be discussed. That is not presented in your instructions at the moment. Basically though, you have a pretty good essay that only suffers from a lack of clear discussion presentation. There is a lack of proper thought development for the ideas that you presented. You should have taken only one reason for each side to represent the discussion. As long as you properly developed your defense of the reason, there would not have been any need to present multiple supporting facts that were not properly developed for the essay. This scatter brained line of reasoning would have adversely affected your final score in the end had this been an actual test.

Thank you very much for your evaluation. What IELTS band shall I get for this essay?

Ahamad, I cannot score this test accurately because the prompt instructions that you provided is incomplete. I have no idea as to how you were expected to argue the topic in the essay. Normally, the students that post their essays for review here include their complete prompt instructions, not just the discussion topic. The reason that they do that is because we cannot judge the Task Accuracy score without it. Since the task accuracy score is the first step in scoring, I am not able to judge your cohesiveness and coherence either. I am not so concerned about the lexical resource or grammar range and accuracy because those are the least of the concerns when judging the essay. Those 2 last points can receive a high score provided that the first 2 points, deliver a high score as well. So please present the full prompt, with the discussion instruction at the end so that I can properly score your essay.

@ahamad17
I think you are discussing about both sides of the argument and give your opinion at last. In that case your essay is good enough to get 6.5.

very good, everyone has his own point of view and understanding of a topic, you shown yours, I may have other ideas but as I said everyone has his point of view and understanding. well done