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Only the minority of people can learn by themselves; 'better to have a teacher'


kevinhsin1124 11 / 10  
May 25, 2011   #1
When it comes to education, the majority of people believe that education is a life time study. Even when we graduated from school, we should keep learning. In my point of view, a good teacher would change our life. Why I said that, because a good teacher not only can help your academic goal success, but also change your core value. There are some clear reasons, and I will explore it.

First of all, people learn by themselves, maybe they can have the same academic progress with school education. But, that will spend a lot of time to learn by themselves. Especially for math problems, when we have some calculation problems, the teacher can help us to solve problem faster. For me, when I was a high school student, my calculate ability was very bad. Fortunately, my math teacher eliminated my blind point in my calculation, and made me had confidence in math. I am very appreciate my math teacher, because she foster my math ability.

Secondly, studying is not the most important thing for students, learning moral merits is more important than studying. If some young people thought if they made a good grade they can do anything then. That was totally wrong! Hence, school teachers should teach their students have a positive value. Students must be learning honest, charity, humble...etc. At present society, many people only think how to earn more money, they became selfish and elegant. Judge people by their car and bank deposit. That was pity.

Lastly, not everyone can keep learning by themselves. The teacher can help us to keep focus on our studying, learning different course step by step. Imaging a 10 years old kid study itself, how can he focus on his book? He would distract by TV and comic books. Finally, he cannot learn anything. Furthermore, parents have to work to support their family; they have no time to teach their children. Children going to school have to face peer pressure, which will let them keep moving on their academic.

In conclusion, I think only the minority of people can learn by themselves, because they have a different background from others. So, I think it is better to have a teacher in our school life.

Hope you can correct me!!

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isai 12 / 111  
May 25, 2011   #2
Greetings !

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When it comes to education, the majority of people believe that education is a life time study. Even when we graduated from school, we should keep learning. In my point of view, a good teacher would change our life. Why I said that so , because a good teacher is not only could help your academic achievement, but also couls change our core values. There are some clear reasons, and I will explore it.

First of all, people learn by themselves, maybe they can have the same academic progress with school education. However, that would take a longer period to learn by themselves. Especially for maths solution, when we have some calculation problems, the teacher can help us to solve the problem easily . When I was a high school student, my calculation ability was very bad. Fortunately, my math teacher eliminated my blind point in my calculation, and made me had confidence in math. I always appreciate my math teacher, because she could foster my math ability.

Secondly, studying is not the most important thing for students, learning moral values are more important than studying. Some young people thought if they made a good grade they can do anything then. That was a wrong perception. Hence, school teachers should teach their students to have a positive value. Students must learn to be honest, sincere humble , respecful.At present society, many people only think how to earn more money and later on they became selfish and elegant. Judge people by their car and bank deposit is a horrible image on people

Lastly, not everyone can keep learning by themselves. The teacher can help us to keep focus on our studies, learning different course step by step in different approaches. Imaging a 10 years old kid study itself, how can he/she focus on his/her studies? He would be disturbed by TV and comic books. Finally, he/she cannot learn anything. Furthermore, parents have to support their family; they have no time to teach their children. Children go to school have to face peer pressure, which will let them keep moving on their academic.

In conclusion, I think only the minority of people can learn by themselves as they have a different ability / capacity of learning from others. Thus , I think it is better to have a teacher in our school life.

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EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 26, 2011   #4
Cool thread!

I'll give some other options here:

Even after we have graduated from ...

There are some clear reasons, and I will explore these.

First of all, people learn by themselves, and maybe ...

Some young people may think that if they make a good grade they can accomplish anything.

Children going to school have to face peer pressure, which will interfere with their academic progress.

:-)


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