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IELTS TASK 1: MIXED CHARTS ON EDUCATION IN SINGAPORE


amira11545 8 / 15 5  
Oct 18, 2020   #1

IELTS TASK 1: MIXED CHARTS



Singapore
The bar chart compares average number of years males and females attended school and the pie chart illustrates levels of education attained by adults in Singapore between 2000 and 2010. Overall, there was an increase in the number of years spent at school for both males and females, and the figure for men was higher throughout the period. Also, the level of education in Singapore increased over 10 years.

According to the bar chart, in 2000, the average number of years males attended school was around 9 years, which gradually rose to nearly 12 years in 2010. Meanwhile, females spent an average of 8 years at school in 2000. This figure remained stable until 2004 and slightly increased to reach 9 years in 2010.

As can be seen from the pie charts, in 2000, nearly one-third of Singapore's population finished high school. The figures for primary and secondary schools were almost identical (with 30% for each), compared to nearly 8% studying for a master degree. However, after 10 years, the level of education people in Singapore achieved was significantly higher, with nearly 33% pursue tertiary education, and only 2% leaving after finishing primary school.

(Word count: 190 words)






Hiwi_Life 10 / 31 7  
Oct 18, 2020   #2
@amira11545
190 words for task one is good. However, it will be nice if you could have a sentence to conclude what you had described in the last two paragraphs.
Holt [Contributor] - / 9,520 2962  
Oct 19, 2020   #3
Rather than saying "According to", use the phrase "Based on" instead. It is more academic sounding since you are reporting in factual information. Good work on analyzing the bar chart in relation to the 12 year presentation. You used the correct estimation representation for that figure which shows a proper analysis of the given image and measurements.

There are time when a comma will be more effective than using the word "and" in a presentation. Remember that you are scored on proper punctuation mark usage so you get a better scoring consideration when you say; " This figure remained... until 2004 , slightly increasing to 9 ..." when compared to "... until 2004 and slightly increasing..."

Always assume the reader will not have access to the pie images. That is why you are being asked to consider a target audience for a written report. Never refer the reader to the present image as in: " As can be seen...". The idea is to have you describe the images academically, in a manner that will create a written report that can be easily visualized by the reader.


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