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TOEFL: Modern cooking methods have improved our life-style significantly


fairwind 2 / 5  
Jul 10, 2011   #1
Topic: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With technology advances, food has become easier to prepare in modern days. People now can use kitchen appliances such as microwave and toaster to cook their meals easier and more convenient than before. Also, instant food products take only a few minutes to be made into delicious meals. These changes make cooking so easy-to-use and time-saving as to improve the way we live to a great extent.

First of all, people have more chance to do other activities they like since food preparation is no longer time-consuming. For instance, such a change has liberated many housewives from tedious cooking process and gave them additional time to do something more meaningful like accompanying family or doing a job. On the other hand, more people can sleep a bit later to go to work because they only need a couple of time to prepare for the breakfasts.

At the second point, since food preparation has become easier and more convenient, it is certainly great to preserve diverse kinds of foods at home. People can have a variety of dishes even in a small meal and choose whatever they like. More men, on the other hand, are willing to participate in cooking that they had never done before. This transformation may bring positive impacts to family in some cases.

In conclusion, the time-saving, simple food preparation process gives us more time to do other activities, more chance to select diverse kinds of foods and more willingness to cook meals. Of course, there may be some other perspectives that I neglected to fully consider. Nevertheless, for the reasons that I have presented above, I would assert that this change has improved our life significantly.

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EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Jul 10, 2011   #2
Due to advances in technology , food has become easier to prepare in modern days.

People now can use kitchen appliances such as microwaves and toasters to cook their meals easier and more conveniently than before.

These changes make cooking so easy-to-use and time-saving as to improve the way we live to a great extent.

First of all, people have more time to do other activities they like since food preparation is no longer so time-consuming.

On the other handAlso, more people can sleep a bit later to go tobefore work because they only need a couple of minutes to prepare for the breakfasts.

...easier and more convenient, it is certainly great to produce diverse kinds of foods at home.

More men, on the other hand, are willing to participate in cooking that they had never done before. This transformation may bring positive impacts to family in some cases.---And has probably saved a few marriages!!

...to do other activities, more chances to select diverse kinds of foods and more willingness to cook meals.

...above, I would assert that this change has improved our lives significantly.

You made some great points!
Good luck in school!

:)
OP fairwind 2 / 5  
Jul 22, 2011   #3
Thanks for your help, but I wonder that what's the difference between "with" and "due to" in my first sentence,

because I see so many articles use "with" rather than "due to".
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 24, 2011   #4
It is really not a big difference. Susan made a change because it sounds awkward to say, "With technology advances..."

I would even do it like this:
With advancements in technology, food has become...
or
Due to advancements in technology, food has become...

technology advances -- This is not incorrect, but it is a little awkward.

This seems less awkward:
advances in technology
advancement in technology

It's just a matter of writing style I guess. :-)


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